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A Soldiers Life - 223 - Blood Hunt

🕑 Added 2024-07-03 02:22:08 +0000 UTC

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Erick Davis

Now is Eryk Auditore ❤️

Erick Thiemke

corrected

Erick Thiemke

corrected - weird

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Erick Thiemke

yeah - hilarious

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Brianna Stormcloud

That was fun 📖 🍿

Andrew Crews

We both rolled around, seeking advantage on the wooden *. We both rolled around, seeking advantage on the wooden floor.

Andrew Crews

How you do today will help us determine what we must focus on for the little *tie we have.” How you do today will help us determine what we must focus on for the little time we have.”

Andrew Crews

Hearne grinned *as asked, “A Hound never rests and is always on watch. Can anyone name the four streets in the upper district?” Hearne grinned as he asked, “A Hound never rests and is always on watch. Can anyone name the four streets in the upper district?”

Rahul Paul

The office reference

Apophixas

Bro learned Air Walk. 🤣

Oeon

Bro literally Assassins Creed-ed it. The guards. The villa. The interrogation. The free fall escape. And the blend in with crowds.

Robert Biederman

As long as his aether holds out he could go through the air for any distance

Robert Biederman

I am assuming that once an airshield is placed within the air it is static it cannot be moved if this is the case why can't he just create steps in the air just walk or even run for that matter the way he is using them seems inefficient

Kevin O'Malley

tyftc

Adunn

I wish some of the others were more competent.

Fortunis

He totally should have yelled "parkour" 😆 🤣

Ivan Kanewske

We both rolled around, seeking advantage on the wooden. Cato’s problem was he didn’t protect the scarf. Probably should add floor after wooden

Ivan Kanewske

crouched and listened for an alarm an the marble balcony. Should be An alarm on

Tetsu-nii

Typo & suggestion: /Several pups were stupid enough to fight back against the pups and were subdued by guards with force./ 2nd "pups" => "guards"? If so, I'd suggest: /Several pups were stupid enough to fight back against the *guards* and were subdued *forcefully*./

Tetsu-nii

Typo: /advantage on the wooden./ Missing "floor" at the end?

Tetsu-nii

Typo: /glass with a luxury/ => /glass *was* …/

Tetsu-nii

Punctuation: /broken into a nobles home/ => /[…] *noble's* …/

Tetsu-nii

Punctuation: /Of course, Konstantin would know./ Remove the comma.

Tetsu-nii

Typo: /for the little tie we have/ => /[…] little *time* …/

Tetsu-nii

Punctuation: Missing quotation marks in /“Three of you will be working alone. He handed Sigma, Val, and me our own compass. The rest of you will have to divide into two teams.”/ Should be a close q-mark after "working alone", and an open q-mark before "The rest of".

Tetsu-nii

Typo: Remove the quotation marks around the sentence that begins /Konstantin pulled out four more blood compasses …/

Caledon Smith

My mind jumped to Dresden Files which I know did it before the office, :-) I’m just old like that I guess

NightRider

Shouldn’t Eryk have gotten himself a local guide to learn the street names and landmarks of the city he is in, instead of going back to rest at the barracks. Konstantin will be disappointed by him again, not spending his time wisely especially that they are going to be in the city for the next week.

Roberto Dias

He have the scarf. Already won. Until sunset is time to hustle. Sell/buy/make/plan/lay/find/hide/dig/talk/whatever. Lots of things he can do. While the opposition is busy..

Daniel kanevsky

Yeah but if they delay him from getting back to the barracks, he still loses

Roberto Dias

Now he got time to do the recon/scouting of the wall/city Konstantin was bitching about. And do some prepping...

Roberto Dias

Don't want to sound like a whining baby, but... Buaaa... more soldier.... gimme more soldier.... buaaa.... Addicted here... And Thanks for the chapter

larback

It would be great to have a chapter a day of this story. Thanks for the chapter.

Silver Beard

The Hounds know his public abilities. It's the other pups (who all owe patronage to a first citizen for sponsorship) he has to be circumspect around

Erick Thiemke

Probably. Is that what Ron Wesley says a lot. The first draft had him experimenting with rats and the blood compass to figure things out but then I added that the same was destroyed when the blood compass was open so I had to delete the paragraph…otherwise the title could have been Bloody Rats

Da Worst John

You thinking "Bloody Hell"?

Angus

Correction 2) - in the corner that would shield me if I hoped over the wall. Should be "hopped"

Angus

Correction 1) we must focus on for the little tie we have . Should be "time"

Erick Thiemke

Like the blood mention — bloody something. What do the brits say?

Erick Thiemke

At least one Office fan

Da Worst John

Chapter title suggestion: "Circulation" or "Blood Circulation"

Silver Beard

It's in his space; pretty safe

Hassan Al Lail

Now he has to protect the scarf until he returns.

Jelani Willock

PARKOUR

Silver Beard

Don't know about enjoying his day off. Didn't chapter start with a grilling about being lazy for 2 days? Chance to fix his mistake and start looking for his own place to hide when he gets hunted.

Scion

I thought he wasn't supposed to be drawing attention to himself

Caledon Smith

Thanks for the chapter, seemed short though, like it needed a stronger conclusion. I’m sure you saved the scene of the nights outcomes for the next chapter, but it feels like this one should include a few paragraphs about how he enjoyed his night before ending it with him returning maybe. Just my thoughts, thanks again.

Eriach

Very nice.

Andrew

Thank you!

Grant lee merrifield

Woot

Erick Thiemke

4th of 4 for cycle. For those of you who dont know a cycle is a week from Wed to Tues. I write 4 chapters a week for the Seraphim Tier


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