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38: Wager

🕑 Added 2021-06-25 20:13:13 +0000 UTC

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fbt

actually, this seems ok to me as is. [This one] is the rabbit referring to herself. [it] refers to the varnish, ofc. She said the varnish smelled like crap, was told to be more proper, and so she repeated the sentiment in the stilted (but grammatically correct) style often used in cultivation stories. Not sure what you're objecting to here, tbh..."the stench is repulsive" and "it smells repulsive" are both valid but CF's version is stronger and stylistically superior IMHO.

Midjji

"This one declares it smells positively repulsive. " Is a writing bug, it should be "This one declares the stench is positively repulsive" unless ypu want to show her still learning, in which case you may want to have the snake patiently and kindly point it out.

DonThaAries

I couldn't contain myself anymore and I had to join. Love the story so far! Bi De's progress is getting so good. The rep of Fa Ram is going to be legendary

Brian P.

I'm reminded of Splinter learning in the first TMNT movie.

Imspinnennetz

I am excited to see Mientiao honoring his dead master by making and selling high quality pottery. I fully expect that Jin will combine Mientiao's glass based Qi and Yin's sun based Qi to help them create a greenhouse.

Kristof Dohrmann

Man, I'm really glad they are coming to the Fa Ram, so many things I'm excited for. Hope Meimei can maybe heal the Noodle or at least make him better. I also hope Noodle teaches Jin to make glas.

Nicolas Flamel

Thanks!

A disgruntled nondescript squirrel

and so big d's harem grows once more.

Bookman

Thanks for the chapter. I put it 50/50 of them going straight to fa ram or going with bi de. Glad they follow him along. People will be even more confused now when they see them.

rovingpen

“ So young, when he found me in the first” first should be forest? “ The found the trail.” The should be they?

Imspinnennetz

I agree that the harem trope is jarring especially as it always seems like the relationship is always polygyny and never polyandry. However, Jin's teachings tend to discourage such behavior. I expect that Yin and Bi De's comments on each other is more mutual admiration of one's cultivation than full romance.

Dale Tucker

Boy, that was a good read. I hope we get a Jin chapter soon. Been a while since he shoveled someone

Aesoir

The premise/direction of the chapter is good. But the perspective skips during the telling on the pairs history was, jarring? Seemed almost clunky in execution. Might be better just to just have a conversation from a one of the animals perspective, and then shift for the fight/resolution.

Leonard Marchant

Can't say I care for the stuff between Yin and Bi De, I'm not used to this fic making me uncomfortable.

Jack Trowell

With the addition of the snake and the rabbit, we are close to having completed the chinese zodiac.

Isaac Boyles

I absolutely love this. I wasn't sure how you were going to resolve this in a satisfactory way, but this actually feels right. It makes sense, it addresses what needs to be addressed for the two to have at least a little closure about their mission, and it is a solution that I hadn't thought of - that's not at all impossible, of course, but I read a lot of genre stuff so it's at least a little notable I like to think.

OlivierA

Reminder that Bi De is already a Xianxia harem protagonist

Bobby B.

I really like the flipped reflection here, the shaolin monks learned kungfu by watching animals, animals gain a spark by watching humans

Empty Shelf

Bi De - "She was very good. She was beautiful." Ri Zu - ): Yin - "His feathers were regal, and he was very handsome." Ri Zu - D:

Saaski

I love that you called the snake noodle.

Bobby B.

Big D, what a dog!!! The chickens, the rat, other chickens, and now a rabbit? Truly a peerless existence.

The Lost Pages

This was a truly glorious and epic chapter. Had goosebumps while reading it. Wow. Absolutely phenomenal.

Seaspike

Farming for the rabbit. The snake has knowledge and experience in pottery and glassblowing, which would be very welcome.

Andrew

Thank you!

Imspinnennetz

Looks like the broken pottery will be made new with Kintsugi. Poor Tigger is going to be furious that she has competition from Yin in being a headstrong weapon of Fa Ram.

Stephen Pearson

Thanks for the chapter! :-)

Casualfarmer

Yes. The Snake is Glass/pottery based, witha bit of fire in him, while Rabbit is all Sun.

Bunny Waffles

Yesssss. The broken noodle and the war lepus have found new purpose! Now we just have to find out what kind of farm work they are best at! Also I wanna see just how well the bunny and Tigger get along with each other.

Arnon Parenti

This was a bright chapter after the gloom and doom of the previous few, I enjoyed it a lot.

Sean Ulrich

And am I correct in saying that Noodles arts were Broken Urn and Twisssted View?

Sean Ulrich

I like the dichotomy? I think that’s the word. A moon rabbit studying sun based moves and a chicken observing the moon. Also how Noodle repeats his S’s in his moves.


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