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Netherwitch - 54

🕑 Added 2025-10-28 16:00:06 +0000 UTC

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farichada

Very good as always. I like the slight tone shift of this arc. Looking forward to more trade that isn't human trafficking, but gives a good opportunity to develop the underbelly and reveal more about slave culture in Hell. A few minor correction suggestions. Singular vs. plural genera -> genus - used a few times I believe the singular word is more correct, hence genus. Name misspelled Dmirty -> Dmitry Wrong word paper work -> paperwork Paperwork seems more correct in this context, but kind of a petty correction. Missing article the first floor of the villa was display of wealth and elegance. -> the first floor of the villa was a display of wealth and elegance.

Steve Barbour

Fixed, thanks.

Lijwent

Hunting for a uniform was waste a waste of time. -> duplicate "waste"

MadGod

As far as I can tell, the heavenly will was never meant to eradicate evil, just maintain a bottom line. If it's too strict, it will impede free will and turn into a tool of unbreakable tyranny, which is exactly what it was made to overturn. Free will means allowing people to make wrong choices and suffer the consequences.

MadGod

That only works because Lucifer pays them with system software and skill books. He's creating value from nothing. No other place can replicate this.

Kurosov

--Most labor in the netherworld is completed by hand, making cheap workers desirable. And slaves are the cheapest labor that can be found.-- The cloud Island Wilderness on the other hand easily banned slavery and replaced it with a more effective system uniquely fitting to it's residents. Quests. They combined the need to earn a living with the obsessive completionist tendencies of the gamers to have labour handled in an ad hoc temp worker program with tasks assigned as need demands all automated and managed by the system.

Tilberin

The heavenly will seems a bit too easy to game. Or maybe slavery doesn't incur as large a penalty (according to modern sensibilities) since the methods of keeping karma in check don't seem proportionate.

Steve Barbour

Indeed it should, fixed.

Sardionysius

What would happen if she let his man conquer her? Control her? … should thus be “let this”?

Steve Barbour

I posted it early on Space Battles when there was the great slavery debate.

AchroniaXenia

Wasn't the Slave "afterword" used before? I feel like I've read that bit before And It's cruel to end the Slavery Chapter at that point, Evil Author


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