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Netherwitch - 55

🕑 Added 2025-11-01 16:00:18 +0000 UTC

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farichada

Great chapter again. I really like the insights on the hobgoblin and law magic as well as how the fight was paced and described. A couple of minor correction suggestions. missing word/awkward phrasing ... tumbling into the out. → tumbling out. or into outsides. or this can be corrected many other ways. comma splice/run on Blood splattered, the scattered droplets continuing on their path. → Blood splattered; the scattered droplets continued on their path. or Blood splattered. The scattered droplets continued on their path.

Epsilon

Ever since I played Final Fantasy XIV, I make a habit of reading the voice of particularly foul and entitled men like little Baron Naopte here in the voice of Lord Vauthry. It always seems appropriate, especially when they get their just deserts.


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