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17 - ETA 15 Minutes

🕑 Added 2022-01-16 17:23:01 +0000 UTC

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I'm really happy to hear that. I find that one of my weaknesses is a very mechanical writing style. I'm actively working to make things flow and feel more organic.

Stephen Pearson

By the way, I'm really hoping he prioritizes getting at least a low-grade healing spell ASAP, especially given his recent experiences.

Stephen Pearson

Thanks for the chapter:-) It's funny, I was reading another story recently on RR where I enjoy the system, but the writing is monotonous and robotic; things are just described happening one after the other. Reading your work and in particular this chapter today was a great contrast, really conveying feeling and emotional depth. Well done!

The Lost Pages

Not sure if it is just me, but I was a bit confused why he went back to his house. Other than that I loved this chapter.


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