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[MA] 106. Receptacles of Hope

🕑 Added 2022-02-21 18:40:28 +0000 UTC

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Zaim İpek

That bit does seem like it needs some work. I understand the intent, but that's because I developed the skill after reading many terrible translations of stories.

Gardor

"The red orb strengthened Liya's soul, and the black orb her mind. Half the mind was hosted in the soul, so her soul grew stronger, too, going through the same changes as her body." Word salad

Zaim İpek

I like that she got a fancy power-boost. The way it was described seems like the expansion to her soul also accomplished a similar effect as the learning upgrade. Hopefully she can meet the path qualifications and the AP cost for the B-rank upgrade soon. I also wonder what rank of learning upgrade she has. What's funny in this chapter is that brief description that she looks too much like a high-elf now. So she is no longer super-hot by Orc standards. The Orcs would probably cry to see that she is less muscular and scarred. I imagine her previous form to be somewhere between a professional body-builder, olympic gymnast, professional weight-lifter and UFC fighter with lots of scars. The ideal Orcish beauty. But now she is probably all smooth skin and curves, with some extra muscle definition. No signs of a battle-hardened war veteran. But in human beauty standards, she probably became much prettier. The differing beauty standards are funny to me, and the way Liya probably only sees her body as a tool to accomplish her goals is also kind of funny.

Zaim İpek

Why do you want conflict between Shen and Liya? He needs a teacher. We know from much earlier chapters that he sincerely wants a teacher/mentor. He has seen the difference between loose cultivators who are mostly self-taught with the help of some manuals and cultivators who are properly instructed by someone with significantly more experience and resources than themselves. I can't imagine a reason why he would reject someone who is trying to help him. He might be suspicious of her intentions and if she is genuine, but I don't think that suspicion will last long, due to how sincere she is in everything she does. If anything, he will feel immediately refreshed by speaking with her and realizing that he isn't constantly trying to decipher the cultural context and body-language.

sqeesqad

I'm hoping he does not agree with 'the drow way' at all, causing conflict. Can he reject her as his mentor (or whatever she was)


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