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Rough Draft - Blood & Chlorophyll Ch. 13

🕑 Added 2024-11-11 18:00:04 +0000 UTC

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Nyx Nyghtingale

It's probably just a bug on the site's end then. No worries! I appreciate your thoroughness, if nothing else :)

AFanofRoses

This might not make you feel better, but you deserve to know the truth: I've never gotten a notification when you edit a post. The only reason I came back to this one after a week is because of your comment a week ago saying you'd update it, and I've kept the tab open and checked on it a few times since then.

Nyx Nyghtingale

That's interesting, as when I edit a post, there's a specific button marked "Notify members about your edit." Maybe I forgot to check that box this time? I really can't say.

AFanofRoses

I just read the update, and I like that the ending is a bit more open and uncertain. There's nothing wrong with the girls figuring themselves out before rushing into anything. There were a few notes I have, which I made on the Google Document. One other thing I'll mention is that Patreon doesn't notify us when you edit a post (or at least, it doesn't notify me), so your claim that you'll "push out a notification whenever I get around to editing that bit" didn't happen (again, not for me, I won't claim what notifications anyone else gets). Not necessarily a bad thing if it's not important to you that a lot of people read the update, but I wanted to bring it up just in case.

Nyx Nyghtingale

1) I'll take another look at the phone thing! It probably just slipped my mind. 2) Personally, I think there are multiple ways to look at nature. One camp is "all life is precious" and the other is "nature is a cycle of life and death". I feel Alicia is much more the second camp. As someone who does a lot of gardening, she's used to the idea that trimming a plant is often good for the ecosystem. 3) I'm glad you like that line! I was very happy with it myself :)

AFanofRoses

I enjoy the direction the series is going! It's great to see that this happy lesbian drama isn't going to stray too far away from the fated disaster couple. And I eagerly await the change to the final conversation that you mentioned! I have a few questions about this chapter, though. 1) How does Alicia have her phone after she leaves her house? She mentioned in a previous chapter that she can't take it with her when she merges with her Heart Tree, which she did here to get downstairs. Just wanted to point it out. 2) Does Alicia feel bad about killing plants? I assumed she would have some remorse when she "snuffed out the various weeds, roots, and vines that had taken up residence underground," but that may just be me projecting. 3) How can you make your characters so darn cute? “You’re not hurt too bad, are you? Did you get lots of time in the sun today?” may be one of the most adorable lines ever!

Nyx Nyghtingale

After putting this chapter out for my fellow authors in the BM universe, and for my Beta Readers, I've decided that I will be re-writing a bit of the ending. As it stands now, the conversation about Alicia's and anxieties (and possibly being poly) resolves a bit too cleanly for my liking. I'll push out a notification whenever I get around to editing that bit.


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