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Rough Draft - Suddenly A Succubus Ch. 31
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Chloé had been looking forward to today all week. Her roommate, Kendra, had multiple finals this morning, whereas Chloé had none. This meant she had the entire place to herself, without any worry of being annoyed or interrupted. She hadn’t bothered setting an alarm, and got an extra hour of sleep compared to her usual weekdays. After waking up, she grabbed her Switch and happily played a few hours of Hollow Knight without even leaving her bed.
It was much easier to focus without Kendra around. Multiple boss battles had been giving her trouble, but with the dorm peacefully quiet, she finally managed to best them. As much as she wanted to continue playing past those fights, however, she knew there were other matters to attend to.
Specifically, her attention started wavering. Instead of hyper focusing on dodge timing, her eyes kept wandering to the drawer that held her magic wand. It had been nearly a week since she’d last needed it, and she had hormone therapy to thank for that. In the before times, as she liked to call them, her high testosterone had controlled nearly every moment of her life. Constantly thinking about sex, daydreaming about all the naughty things she wanted done to her; it had been practically impossible to focus on anything else.
Now, thankfully, it felt like she controlled her body rather than the other way around. The curse of masculinity had been lifted, and she was free to masturbate only when she wanted to.
And today? She very much wanted to.
She opened the drawer, grabbing her magic wand and stretching the power cord to the outlet behind her bed. Next, she reached between her legs, delicately repositioning her sex until it pointed up towards her bellybutton. The feel of her soft hands excited her, and her breath quickened in anticipation.
She pulled her wand closer, sliding it beneath the sheets, but she didn’t turn it on yet. She wanted to take her time, to enjoy teasing herself before the real fun began. She ran her fingers over her thighs, drawing small circles in her sensitive skin before slowly creeping higher. She was still wearing her panties, they helped keep everything in place, and she playfully traced their edge, pretending she had a lover that was nervous to push further.
Next, her hands moved to her waist, where she hugged herself tight. Her fingernails lightly scratched her sides, and she bit her lip in appreciation of the feeling. Moving higher still, she pushed inside her loose shirt until she found her breasts. They were small, but her transition had made them delightfully sensitive.
Accidentally hitting her chest with a fridge door might not sound like a gender-affirming activity, but for Chloé it had been a moment of revelation. It had hurt like hell, though the pain had subsided when she’d pieced together what the pain meant. She had tits! They were sensitive! Needless to say, she’d shut herself in her room that night for some very excited experimentation.
As her fingers ran over her nipples, her thoughts happily returned to the present. Her body tingled at the feeling, and she spent a minute delicately tracing circles before giving in to temptation. She began to pinch herself, taking great care not to be too rough, and her back arched in appreciation. Her breath caught in her throat, and she even dared to let loose a small moan of pleasure. She lost track of time as she played with her nipples, her legs squeezing the dormant wand between them.
The pressure eventually grew too much, and she moved one hand away from her chest. It traveled down, finding the power button on her magic wand, then pushed it.
Pleasure immediately shot through Chloé’s body. The head of the wand was sitting lower, against the base of her shaft, and the vibrations felt amazing. Though she was more sensitive in other areas, this was the perfect place to begin playing with herself. In its current position, the wand was stimulating her with deep, slow, rumbling movements. Not enough to drive her crazy, but enough to set the stage for the excitement to come.
While one hand continued to pinch and tease her nipples, the other began stroking her shaft. Only light movements, using a couple fingers to carefully massage the top half of her sex.
In the before times, masturbation had been quick, messy, and brutish. There had been no incentive to take her time, or to bother learning about her body; not when she frequently needed to take care of herself multiple times a day. Now, the process felt more akin to making love, and she relished the chance to tenderly coax her pleasure out.
It was finally time for more, she was thoroughly worked up. She stopped massaging herself, then grabbed the wand and pulled it higher. She moaned again, louder, as the soft head of the toy made contact with the soft head of her sex. The sensation was almost too much, and she pushed the wand down an inch. This was the perfect spot, and she repositioned her grip to make sure her excited squirming wouldn’t throw the wand out of position.
Her hips began thrusting, eager to feel the vibrations that coursed through her body. Her offhand, still teasing and pinching her nipples, began to squeeze harder. Almost a little too hard, but now that she was worked up, the intensity felt amazing.
She clicked a button on the wand, and the vibrations doubled in speed. Chloé’s eyes rolled back in her head, and her hips twitched involuntarily from the increased pleasure. Her entire body joined in next, eagerly surfing the vibrations of the wand as the increased intensity took command. Her breath grew ragged, her moans turning into gasps as she begged for release. She danced with the vibrations for nearly a minute before the sensation proved too much for her.
When she came, everything froze. She held her breath, scared to release it and spoil the moment. Her hips stopped thrusting, her thighs squeezed tight as if worried her orgasm might escape before its time. Pleasure raced through her, starting at her sex, then surging through every nerve and fiber in her being. She threw her head back, her back arched, and moaned quietly to herself.
After the initial pleasure, the orgasm continued its rounds, circulating through her body over and over. Her toes curled, her legs bent, her core tensed and released as she continued gasping excitedly.
When she finally released her hold on her breasts, as the orgasm began to fade from her body, she reached further down to tenderly cradle her wand. She clicked a button, and the vibrations quieted somewhat. She kept her eyes closed, focusing on the afterglow of her climax, then slowly worked the wand further down to keep reducing its intensity. Before long, her body had relaxed entirely, her breath was quiet, and she turned the wand off entirely.
Releasing her grip on the toy, she moved her hands to her head and pushed the hair from her eyes. With a deep breath, she stretched her arms out, and sat up.
“Wow. Fuck, I needed that,” Chloé said.
With her head now clear, and the passion gone from her system, she put her wand away and headed for the bathroom to get ready. Within the hour, she was sitting down to take the only final she had scheduled today.
The exam passed quickly enough, and she felt good about her performance. Even better, with the test now over, she was officially halfway through her week. She could spend the rest of today relaxing and, after two more days of finals, winter break would officially begin. As she left Brandt Hall, she thought about what she wanted to do with her long break.
Aurelius University had a fairly generous holiday break, giving students four entire weeks to spend at home with their loved ones. Or, in Chloé’s case, hidden away in her dorm while continually trying to convince her family that she definitely didn’t have a choice to come home for the break.
Chloé had never fit in with her family, even before she discovered she was a woman. They had always made her feel small and insignificant, like her ideas didn’t matter to them. She wasn’t a person with thoughts and opinions, she was an object that needed to do as it was told to maintain the appearance of a happy family. She had taught herself to stay hidden, to bury her feelings out of fear that a neighbor or relative might turn the community against her.
As she grew older, she began to understand how hateful her hometown was. Although they preached love and acceptance, their actions were designed to uphold an existing status quo. Chloé’s growing interest in queer communities, and her desire to give the disenfranchised a helping hand, forced her even deeper into hiding.
College had been a fresh start. A chance to present the real her, a proud trans woman that wanted to organize charity efforts. To this day, she was still amazed at how accepting everyone had been. Her closest friends, Amara, Tessa, and Vee had met their Freshman year in a class designed to help new students acclimate to college life. They’d been enthusiastic about her charity efforts, they’d encouraged her to go out and meet new people, and through them, Chloé had started to develop a sense of pride in her identity.
She wasn’t looking forward to losing them over Winter Break.
Although, they’re barely here now…
The last month or so had been tough for Chloé. Amara and Vee had gotten in a fight over Nick, then Vee had gotten hurt in that house fire. When she returned, she’d still been mad at Amara, and the group was still recovering. Chloé didn’t really understand all the social drama, and she was scared about losing her friends. Her hope was that, after the break, everything would be better.
At the moment, Chloé was walking across the Quad to head back to her dorm. Her train of thought was interrupted by the voice of a stranger speaking up.
“Hi, excuse me? You’re Chloé, right?” the voice said.
Startled, Chloé looked up from the ground and into the big, bright eyes of this new person. She had very dark skin, and her thick, curly hair sat collected atop her head. “Oh, yes, that’s me. I’m sorry, have we met before? I’m bad at remembering faces.”
The stranger smiled and shook her head. “Nope! This is our first time meeting, but we have some mutual friends, and I’ve seen you around a few times. My name’s Naomi!”
Chloé shook Naomi’s hand before quickly putting her own back in her coat pocket. “It’s nice to meet you, Naomi. What friends do we have in common?”
“Mostly Tessa. She and I have hooked up a few times.”
“That certainly sounds like her! Did you, um, need something? I was just on my way home, but you can walk with me if you like.”
“I was actually hoping you could help me out with a project of mine. I’m majoring in Investigative Journalism, and I wanted to write a piece about cult mentality. I’m going around campus interviewing everyone I can to try and piece together how something like this cult gets started, and what drives people to join in.”
“Oh, of course! I’d love to help you out!” Chloé smiled, always eager for a chance to give more students a voice.
“I’ll also be recording this, just a heads up. So, first question: Did you know Brandon Nowak?” Naomi asked. As she started her questioning, she pulled out her phone and clicked a button.
Chloé shook her head. “Doesn’t sound familiar. Was he in the cult?”
Naomi gave her a curious look. “He was, yeah. You really don’t know who he was? At various points the last few months, he was stalking both Amara and Tessa. They never mentioned him?”
“Oh, the stalker! I’d heard about him, but I guess I never caught his name. I only learned about that a few days ago, honestly.”
“Hm. Interesting.” Naomi typed something in her phone, then continued. “Did you know any of the other people involved? Professor Luxnor, Mark Summers, Chris Miller?”
“Sorry, nothing. I’m not the most sociable person and, like I said, I’m bad with faces even when I try.”
“There’s no need to apologize! I’m not looking for anything in particular here. Next question: Have you noticed any odd behavior the last week or so? Ever since this news broke?”
Chloé paused, not fully understanding the question. “Um, no? I thought you were asking about the cult.”
“I’m looking into cult mentality, primarily, but also the effects cults can have in a larger community. What about Amara, Tessa, and Vee, have they been acting any differently recently?”
“Not at all!” Chloé said. “I mean, Amara and Vee are sick and missing all their exams, which sucks. I guess Tessa and Nick have been pretty distracted too, but they’re trying to help Amara and Vee out, plus its finals week, so it makes sense that they’d be a little distracted.”
“Have you talked to Amara or Vee recently?”
“I… no, I haven’t. I’ve been texting them, but they haven’t texted back. But they’re sick! They need to rest, and it’s okay that they’re not responding.”
Naomi paused again, seemingly lost in thought about something. Before Chloé could try to piece together what her face meant, she started talking again. “Alright, this next question is a little odd, so I apologize in advance if I upset you. Do you think there’s a chance they could be hiding anything from you?”
“Absolutely not! We’ve been super close ever since school started last year, and they’re my closest friends!” Chloé was talking much faster now, eager to defend everyone. “Why would you even think that?”
“It’s just, when I started looking into this, Amara’s name came up a few times. She’s been pretty popular recently, so people tend to pay attention to her when she’s around. But, when I was talking to her about the cult, what she told me didn’t make sense compared to everything else I’d heard. Then I talked to Tessa, and the same thing happened. I like to think I’m pretty good at reading people, and they both seemed pretty nervous about something.”
“So, what, you come to me hoping I’ll rat them out?” Chloé caught herself off guard with her comment. She hated being confrontational, but hearing Naomi accuse her friends of lying didn’t sit right with her.
“It’s not like that! I’m just confused, and I’m trying to piece together what’s going on. Plus, after all the media outlets that were here last week, it’s not exactly surprising that people are tired of talking about the cult. Look, I’m probably way off base about this, and I’m sorry I upset you, I really am.”
“My friends are good people, Naomi. Things have been a little tough, yes, but there was some drama between Amara and Vee. I think they’re still trying to work things out, and we’ve all been a little on edge, that’s all.”
“Again, I really didn’t mean anything by it. Look, I’ll let you get back to your day, I’ve got everything I need.” Naomi started to walk away, then briefly paused to look back at Chloé. “Though, if you hear anything, feel free to reach out. I’m always happy to listen.”
With the conversation over, Chloé found herself alone with her thoughts once again. She was upset that Naomi had suggested her friends might be lying to her, and in her bad mood, she didn’t feel like going home anymore. She continued thinking about all of Naomi’s strange questions, and eventually an idea popped into her head. Instead of heading back to her dorm, she switched directions to start walking towards Amara’s apartment.
Thankfully, it was a short walk. There were quite a few apartment blocks close to campus, with Vee and Amara even living on the same street. Within minutes, Chloé found herself in the hallway outside of Amara’s apartment. She raised her hand and knocked quietly, hoping she wasn’t disturbing Amara while she was resting.
A minute passed, then two more. Chloé tried knocking again, louder this time, and called out. “Amara? It’s Chloé, I just wanted to come check on you.”
More silence.
Maybe she’s asleep? Tessa didn’t say what Amara was sick with, I only know it’s the third time this semester. Although, thinking back, she always seems fantastic when I see her. She must bounce back from illnesses really fast.
She knocked a third time “Amara? Are you holding up okay? Is there anything I can get for you?”
Why isn’t she answering? Is she really that sick?
Chloé pulled out her phone, checking her texts. Still nothing from Amara, or from Vee. A small part of her was starting to worry, but she shook her head to dislodge the thought.
No, Tessa and Nick have been helping both of them out. They’re just exhausted from being sick, that’s all.
With a heavy sigh, Chloé walked away from Amara’s apartment and started heading home.
She missed her friends. She missed sleepovers, eating lunch with everybody, and hearing about all their passion projects. The last few days, she’d only been getting lunch with Nick and Tessa, and they’d both seemed incredibly distracted. Almost like they were in a rush to leave. Chloé hated to think it, and she felt bad even entertaining the notion, but a part of her wondered.
Could they be hiding something?
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For the second morning in a row, Amara woke up on Vee’s couch. It was, in a way, more strange to be in this house than it was to be in Purgatory. They had known the planes were going to be acting strange, but Vee? The girl that had tried to kill her, then swore that they would never be friends? Now Amara was practically living with her.
Even stranger, Vee had even been somewhat nice these last two days. Yesterday, after the fight with that strange beast, she’d started asking about Amara’s abilities. Was it genuine interest? Or was she just trying to strategize about their escape?
What even was that creature? It passed through walls like a ghost, but I was able to punch it easily enough.
With a groan, Amara stood up and started stretching. She was a little sore from the fight yesterday, and it didn’t help that her wings were cramping from sleeping on the couch. Making sure she was in the middle of the room, she opened her wings as wide as she could and started moving through her standard routine.
She’d been a demon long enough to have a strong understanding of her body, and had designed a series of stretches that helped her wings and tail wake up. The most interesting thing about her demonic limbs, in her opinion, was how flexible they were. After twenty years of living with a standard human body, she’d grown accustomed to limbs that only bent in specific directions. Her tail, in contrast, had full mobility in every direction, and was completely prehensile. Her wings were more limited, likely due to their complex bone structure, but not by much.
She was in the middle of a somewhat elaborate stretch when she heard Vee leave her bedroom. When Amara looked up, she saw Vee standing in the hallway, staring back at her.
“Oh, sorry, I didn’t mean to interrupt,” Vee said, looking away quickly.
Amara rolled her eyes. “It’s not like I’m masturbating; it’s just stretching. The couch is comfy but hell on my wings.”
There was an awkward pause, then Vee cleared her throat and walked to the kitchen. She rummaged through the fridge, throwing together a makeshift breakfast before sitting at the counter. Amara continued stretching for a few more minutes until everything felt loose and limber, then moved to the kitchen to join Vee.
“So, what’s the plan today?” Amara asked.
“Well, our only real lead is the circle under Lysander Hall. If we assume that Tessa is looking for us, she’s bound to go there eventually, right? We could probably just wait there until we hear something, but then we risk running into that creature again.”
“What if we sought the creature out? If we can figure out why it’s here, what it wants, we might be able to figure out how to avoid it.” Amara took a quick pause to eat, then continued. “I’d say we should try to kill it, but I don’t know if that’s possible. I mean, if it lives in Purgatory, it’s probably already dead, right?”
After a moment of contemplation, Vee spoke up. “I’m not against that, honestly. I’d rather face it out in the open than in another cramped hallway. It’s strange that we both spent an entire day exploring campus, but didn’t find that thing until yesterday.”
“Great! We’ll finish eating, then head out!” Amara went back to shoveling food in her mouth, and soon enough they’d both finished eating.
Vee returned to her room and changed into a new outfit, the new clothes looking even warmer than what she’d worn yesterday. She didn’t bother offering any clothes to Amara this time, and when she was finished, the girls left the apartment.
Amara was growing annoyed at how bland everything was. The campus looked exactly the same as it did yesterday, with absolutely no indicators that time had passed since they had returned home. Her thoughts wandered to stories of spelunkers that spent days underground, returning to the surface to find their circadian rhythms completely disrupted. Would that happen to her? Could there be any more dangerous effects to hopping between planes?
She didn’t particularly want to think about it. She was thrilled that her demonic side protected her from the cold of Purgatory, but there were other side effects of traveling through interplanar portals. She remembered Brandon’s last moments, desperately fighting to avoid falling through a portal, only to have his hand severed when the portal closed on it.
A shiver ran through her body, not from the cold, but from the thought of a portal slicing part of her off.
Eager to think of something else, she returned to something more light-hearted; she was determined to figure out Vee’s name, but was running out of names that began with V.
“Okay, what if it’s something weird?” Amara said.
“What, the creatures? They’re pretty strange already, don’t you think?”
“No, like, all my previous guesses have been normal names, but now that I think about it, you probably wouldn’t be ashamed of your name if it was something normal.”
Vee groaned, clearly annoyed by Amara’s persistence. “Ugh, can you just drop it already?”
“Maybe it’s some strange, new-age thing. What about Vengeance? That would be fitting. Wait! I’ve got it!” Amara ran in front of Vee, stopping her in her tracks as she excitedly kept talking. “Vee for Vendetta!”
Amara expected another frustrated groan, but instead, Vee just looked down at the ground. She was strangely quiet, and when she finally responded, her voice was soft and timid. “Why are you doing this?”
“What? I’m just curious about your name. You could stop this at any time,” Amara said.
“That’s not what I mean, and you know it!” Vee’s said, her voice growing louder. “Ever since we got here, you’ve been insufferable! You’re horribly rude, you insult me constantly, and you ignore all requests to stop! What is your problem?!”
“I’m sorry, MY problem?!” Amara met Vee’s escalation, and was now yelling back at her. “My problem is that, two months ago, I started turning into a demon with no fucking clue what was happening to me! And then, before I have the slightest idea what’s going on, one of my best friends decides she wants to fucking kill me! No questions, no conversations, just a quick monologue before you’re trying to shove a sword through my heart!”
“I-I didn’t know—”
“You never tried, Vee! And you know what? I was on your side for weeks! Every time Tessa blamed you for that fight, I defended you. I bent over backwards to try and see your side of things, to give you the benefit of the doubt, because I thought you were right. I spent weeks begging for forgiveness, trying to talk to you, and what happens when you return to campus? You insult me, throw me into your wards, and shoot me in the back!”
Amara stepped closer, jamming a finger into Vee’s chest as she kept shouting. “You’re the one that attacked me! You’re the one avoiding me! You’re the one that swore, to my face, that you didn’t want to be friends anymore! You don’t get to turn around now and complain that I’m being rude to you, Vee, because I’m giving you exactly what you asked for!”
“I never said I didn’t want to be friends!” Vee said.
“So now you’re a liar? Or are you just delusional?”
“I said we couldn’t be friends! Not that I didn’t want to be!” Vee paused, breathing heavily as the shouting match came to a sudden halt. They glared at each other briefly before Amara responded, her words quiet with surprise.
“Wait, do you want to be friends, Vee?”
“Of course I do! I miss you, Amara; you were my best friend. I trusted you with everything! When I learned you were lying about so much, it broke me.”
Amara hesitated, trying to process Vee’s words. “Except you were lying too. Were you ever going to tell me you were an angel?” she asked.
“I… no, I wasn’t. I’ve known I was an angel for as long as I can remember, and the Church told me over and over that I had to keep my identity a secret. If people find out who I am, they stop seeing me as human. I’m suddenly a means to an end; a thing to worship, threaten, and bribe. All they see is what I represent, not who I am.”
Amara’s voice nearly broke as she responded. “Yeah, I wonder what that’s like.”
Vee's eyes went wide. Her mouth opened, attempting to say something, but no sound left her lips. Amara continued talking instead.
“Yes, I’m angry, Vee. I’m angry at you, I’m angry at that stupid cult, I’m angry at the entire fucking world. Do you know how many people have tried to rape me in the last two months alone? Four! And the last three succeeded because I was hungry! I begged them to do it because I needed them to think they were in control, but I was just using them; they were nothing but prey to me. We’re alive right now because I accepted who I was, I embraced the monster everyone thinks I am.”
Amara’s breathing was starting to slow. This entire conversation had caught her by surprise, and she didn’t fully understand what might happen next.
“I don’t think that anymore, Amara,” Vee whispered.
“Well you should.” Amara looked up, her eyes lingering on Vee's scars. “I do. Every time I look at you, I’m reminded how easy it is for me hurt people.”
“What, my scars? I'm the one that almost died, Amara!”
“You think I don't know that? That I don't see what's happening to me?!” Amara hesitated, scared to continue talking. “Something changed the night of the ritual, Vee. Maybe it was the gangbang, or the fight, or being next to an open portal to hell, but it's so much harder to fight my instincts. When I woke up here and found you, I only remembered that you’d been avoiding me all week. So, I thought, okay, if you want us to be enemies, then fine. I'd rather be that than strangers.”
“That’s really what you thought? That I wanted you to insult and demean me?”
“Wouldn’t it be easier? If I turn out to be a malicious, soul-sucking demon, that means you were right. No complicated moral questions, no begging for forgiveness; you get to sleep peacefully knowing the world makes sense. And… and I wouldn’t have any of this guilt.” Amara turned away from Vee, staring up into the lifeless Purgatory sky. A tear fell down her cheek, and she quickly burned it away.
“I don’t want to live in that world,” Vee said, stepping closer. “Not if it means giving up on you. I didn’t save your life to settle a score, I did it because I believed you were trying to be better, but now? This isn’t the Amara I saved.”
Amara wasn’t sure what to say. Before she could piece together her thoughts, Vee spoke up again. “You know what? When we found each other in Purgatory, I was honestly a little happy.”
“Happy to what, spend time with me? You’ve been avoiding me ever since the ritual!”
“Yes! I want to see you, but I’m scared, Amara! My powers don’t work like yours; they’re given to me by an angelic Patron. That’s what I meant when I said we couldn’t be friends; Heaven won’t allow it. What happens if my Patron looks down from Heaven and sees us happily eating lunch together? Do I lose my powers? My life? I have no idea!”
“You seriously think Heaven would kill you for eating lunch with me? I thought they were the good guys?”
“It’s not that simple. I was born because my Patron needed another agent on Earth. How do I know that my magic isn’t the only thing keeping me alive?” Vee’s voice wavered, her fear more than obvious.
Listening to Vee’s words, something finally clicked in Amara’s mind.
She’s just as scared and confused as I am.
“Vee, I—”
“LOOK OUT!” Vee shouted, interrupting Amara before immediately tackling her to the ground. Above them, exactly where Amara’s head had been a moment earlier, a massive ghostly jaw snapped shut.
The ground shook as another horrible creature landed a few feet in front of them. Its huge talons dug into the ground, and its skeletal body swung behind it until it faced Vee and Amara directly. It loosed an ear-piercing scream, the multiple discordant voices forcing the girls to cover their ears.
The creature took a step closer, then raised a claw and tried to slash at them. Before the swipe found them, however, Vee had rolled off of Amara, freeing the demon to jump to her feet and manifest her chitinous gauntlets. She grabbed the creature’s claw to block the attack, and while she skidded backwards slightly, she was able to stop the beast’s momentum. Amara grunted, then manifested more chitinous armor around her feet, turning them into sharpened talons of her own. They dug into the ground, and with the extra stability, she was able to push the creature back.
Amara was furious. Though she had no idea what was happening between her and Vee, they’d finally started talking. She channeled her anger, loosing a scream of her own before grabbing the creature’s claw to use it as leverage. Using her wings, she jumped forward and threw the creature to the ground, causing it to roar in frustration.
From Amara’s side, Vee ran closer with her sword ready. She moved with incredible speed, slashing at the beast repeatedly as she tried to find a vulnerable spot. “This fucking thing is all bones! We need to brute force it!” she yelled.
Before Amara could respond, the beast’s tail whipped towards her. It struck her side, knocking her to the ground, and she shouted a series of expletives as pain shot through her. She watched Vee evade a swipe from the monster’s wing, forcing her to break off her assault to retreat to safety.
With Vee now out of the way, Amara decided she was sick of holding back. Whatever this thing was, it wanted them dead, and it was time to return the favor. Her chitinous gauntlets erupted in flame, and she charged the beast. It seemed ready for her attack and tried to stop her movement with one of its massive claws, but Vee appeared at the last moment to deflect the attack. The angel grunted in pain, and Amara smelled a hint of blood.
With rage in her eyes, and the gap now closed, Amara jumped at the beast’s head and slammed her fist into its skull. At the moment of impact, the fire concentrated around her gauntlet exploded, and Amara felt the bone snap.
The attack clearly shook the beast, and it began staggering as it tried to keep its balance. Amara had clearly wounded it; an intricate web of cracks had appeared in the creature’s skull. Amara was kneeling on the ground, trying to catch her breath, when the creature turned away from her and began to run. It spread its wings, and with a heavy push, it leapt off the ground.
“Amara! It’s getting away, fly after it!” Vee shouted.
Amara nodded, then broke into a sprint as she chased after the creature. Her own wings opened, spreading as wide as they could, and she jumped into the sky. They kept beating, carrying her higher as she closed the distance. She was clearly the faster of the two, and she reached for the creature’s tail to try and force it to the ground.
As she reached for the beast, the heat from her gauntlets began to intensify. It surrounded her, and the creature’s pale body started to grow blurry. It began to blur with the rest of the painfully dull sky, and soon all Amara could see was a wall of gray smoke in front of her. She was now surrounded by a raging inferno of hellfire, and Vee’s voice began to echo in her head.
”Amara… please…”
She grabbed her head, trying to block out the image, but it was too late. She felt her hands around Vee’s neck, squeezing the life out of her, and Amara screamed as she tried to stop herself. She plummeted from the sky, her body going limp before she slammed back to the ground.
The pain of the fall was negligible to the pain of her memories. She was trying to shut her eyes as hard as she could, hoping to force out the specter of what she’d almost done.
Something grabbed her shoulder, rolling her onto her back. “Amara! Amara, are you okay?!”
Vee’s not dead, she’s here with you.
The sound of Vee’s voice cut through Amara’s memories, and when she opened her eyes, the fires of their fight had vanished. Her chitinous armor had disappeared, but she could still see Vee’s terrified face. Except Vee was alive and healthy now, instead terrified of losing her. Vee pulled Amara closer, onto her lap, and quickly pushed the hair from her face. “Amara, are you hurt? Fuck, say something!”
Amara coughed. “Vee? Fucking… ow. What happened?”
“You tell me! It seemed like you’d almost caught up to that thing when you, like, froze up? You grabbed your head, screamed, and fell to the ground!”
Amara tried to get up, then immediately fell back into Vee’s lap as the pain from her fall caught up to her. “Shit, fuck, that stings.”
“Hey, don’t push yourself, that was a nasty fall. You did scare that thing away, at least, so we’re safe for now.”
Hoping the pain would recede shortly, Amara tried to relax. Her breath was still erratic from her flashback, and she tried to breathe deep to calm her nerves. In for two, out for four. After a minute, the tension began to leave her body. A stray thought crossed her mind, and she started chuckling to herself.
“What it is?” Vee asked.
“Just a few minutes ago we were screaming our heads off at each other, and now I’m laying in your lap like we’re besties again. Crazy what a monster attack will do, right?”
After a brief pause, a smile broke on Vee’s face. “Well... don’t get used to it, Hellspawn. We’re mortal enemies, aren’t we?”
Amara initially flinched as Vee called her Hellspawn, but quickly sensed that something had changed. Every other time Vee had said it, the name had been laced with hatred. Now, coupled with Vee’s soft voice, and her almost playful smile, Amara swore it sounded somewhat affectionate.
“Right, of course. Destined to fight for all eternity and all that. Anyways, I’m feeling better, any chance you could help me up, Vengeance?” Amara almost regretted her choice of words, but she caught a hint of a smirk on Vee’s face as the angel shifted her arm.
“Honestly? I don’t think I’d mind if my name were Vengeance. It’s pretty badass.” Vee reached behind Amara’s back, holding her steady to help her up. Soon, both girls were on their feet again, and Amara took a deep breath. She carefully took a step forward, then immediately regretted her decision; another burst of pain shot through her side, exactly where the creature had hit her. Thankfully, Vee reached out and grabbed her arm, then put a hand around her waist. “Alright, you’re not walking home on your own. Put your arm around my shoulder, and let’s get out of here.”
Although frustrated that she wasn’t healing at her normal pace, Amara wasn’t going to argue about the assistance offered. She leaned against Vee, and the two started walking back towards their tiny pocket of the real world.
The girls stayed quiet for several minutes, the only thing breaking the silence the sound of Vee’s shoes on the cold concrete. Amara began thinking about that creature, reviewing the fight in her head as she tried to glean more information from the encounter. “You think those things are mad because we’re alive? Maybe they’re just trying to uphold some kind of deathly balance here in Purgatory.”
“What, like they’re grim reapers or something?”
“Shit, even if I’m wrong, I’m going to start calling them Reapers, that sounds cool as fuck. Although, we don’t know if there are multiple of them, do we? We’ve only seen one at a time so far.”
Vee shifted her grip, her hand sliding slightly higher. “I’ve been assuming multiple, but yeah, it’s just a hunch so far.”
Before Amara responded, she found herself fixating on Vee’s hand. As Amara was only wearing her pajamas, her waist was exposed, and Vee was touching bare skin. It was such a simple act, but Vee hadn’t hesitated to offer her assistance. Unfortunately, the angel's soft touch made Amara painfully aware of how long it had been since she’d last had sex. “They’re fucking disgusting, right? Covered in gross, dripping skin, with their stupid vulture-y bodies. Vulture-like? Vulturic? What’s the right word?”
“I think it’s vulturous, but it’s not like I can check without any internet.”
“That’s stupid, vulturic sounds way cooler.”
The two girls made slow progress, but the trip home was surprisingly enjoyable. They talked about the strange, vulturic monsters they kept attacking them, and about what food Vee still had at home. It wasn’t a groundbreaking conversation, but for the first time since Halloween, they were talking.
By the time they arrived back in Vee’s apartment, Amara already felt much better. The pain had mostly receded, and while she was still sore, she was able to walk on her own. She happily moved to Vee’s living room, then promptly sprawled out all her limbs on the floor. “Ohhhh fuck, it feels so good to lie down. That reaper’s tail really nailed me, and I’m sure the fall didn’t help.”
After grabbing a heavy fleece blanket, Vee sat on the couch closer to Amara’s head and wrapped herself tight. “I’d offer to heal you, but…”
“Yeah, we both know that wouldn’t end well.” Amara sat up, groaning in pain the whole time, then began stretching out her wings. “Still, I’m pretty tough. You should have seen some of the hits Mr. Wellington landed on me.”
Vee didn’t answer. When Amara looked over to her, she noticed that the angel’s eyes were locked on her wings, following them as Amara stretched them out. “What’s it like?” Vee asked.
“What?”
“Flying.” Vee pulled her blanket even tighter.
Amara paused, unsure what to say. “Oh, it’s… it’s fine.” She looked down at the floor, avoiding Vee’s gaze.
“Amara, come on. This only works if we talk to each other.” Vee’s words were surprisingly vulnerable, almost as if she were pleading for an answer.
Silence filled the room. Flying was a huge sore spot for Amara, but she could tell that Vee was trying to have an earnest conversation. With a deep breath, followed by an equally heavy sigh, Amara started talking.
“I can’t fly.”
“What? Amara, I’ve seen you fly with my own eyes. You flew away after our fight on Halloween, and you flew after that reaper.”
Amara looked up at Vee, then turned to face her. “Look, I said this earlier, but I don’t know what’s happening to me. When this whole transformation started, I was alone and terrified.”
“Nick was there, wasn’t he?”
“I mean, yeah, but he wasn’t turning into a demon. There was only so much he could do to keep me calm. Anyways, over the first few weeks, changes kept appearing. First my tail, then my horns. Then I started getting hornier and hornier, then learned that I literally needed sex to function. I hated every step of the process, and Nick saw that.”
“I talked with him a few weeks back. He said he tried to push you into accepting it all, didn’t he?” Vee asked.
Amara nodded. “At some point, I found out Tessa was a witch, and I got really self-conscious. She had cool magic powers, and could read all those runes in the circles, while all I had was a tail and a monstrous libido. Nick decided he wanted to cheer me up, because he could tell I was bummed about it all.”
Vee shifted in her seat, leaning closer. “What did he do?”
“He borrowed a key from a friend and snuck me into the Gymnastics building after hours. See, while I’d been focusing on what I couldn’t do, he had been noticing changes that I hadn’t. He made me try a bunch of stuff, and I finally saw what he meant. I was stronger, faster, and my tail was completely prehensile. It gives me near-perfect balance, and it’s strong enough that I can hang from it! That was the night I finally started seeing this whole demon puberty in a new light.”
Vee giggled to herself. “Demon puberty, I like that.”
“Anyways, flight had been a pretty big sticking point for me. After I saw what Tessa could do, I started wondering if I might get wings at some point. I mean, how cool would it be to fly? So, after all our training, Nick and I hooked up, and my wings appeared. I was so excited! They were huge, they felt super strong, and I just knew I’d be able to fly with them. We were still in the Gymnastics building, so I ran up to the observer deck and jumped off.”
“You did not! That’s so reckless!”
“Well, yeah. I managed to glide for a bit but crashed pretty quickly. I spent the rest of the night figuring out how my wings worked, and after an hour or so, I figured it out. I jumped up into the air, and I flew. But I was still inside, and it felt like riding a bike with training wheels on. The air was still, I couldn’t go more than a few dozen feet up, and there just wasn’t any freedom in it. After that night, every single time I was outside, I stared up at the sky and dreamed about what flying might feel like. I used to sit on my roof, wings out, just to feel the wind run across them.”
“That sounds wonderful, honestly.” Vee moved even closer, sliding down to the floor to sit across from Amara. “What happened next?”
“You know what happened next, it was Halloween. I don’t think I need to go over that for you.”
“Wait, Halloween was the first time you flew outside?”
“The first time. And it was terrible. My eyes were filled with smoke, emergency sirens drowned out my thoughts, and all I wanted to do was escape what had just happened. I mean, for fuck’s sake, I almost killed you, Vee! To this day, I can still feel your blood running down my hands, and I see the look on your face while you begged for your life!” Amara was openly crying now and had no energy to burn her tears away. “I didn’t even know if you’d survived! You weren’t answering my texts, no one heard anything from you, I thought I’d killed you, Vee! And before you say anything, yes, I know how fucking selfish I’m being. You’re the one that almost died, but I’m the one breaking down over here.”
Amara stopped talking, and instead tried to focus on wiping the tears from her face. She flinched in surprise when, instead of saying something, Vee reached out with her blanket and helped dry Amara’s face. “I want to hear this, Amara. Yes, that night was hard for me too, but I want to understand what happened.”
After another deep breath, Amara found the strength to continue. “That’s mostly it. Ever since that night, whenever I try to fly, I flash back to Halloween. I remember what I did, hear you begging for your life, and I crash down to the ground.”
Vee went quiet again. Amara had no idea what to expect, as she’d always assumed Vee wouldn’t want to hear any of this. Would she be mad? Furious at Amara’s hypocrisy? Amara was practically holding her breath as she waited for a response. The silence was agonizing, but after a minute, Vee spoke up again.
“Part of me wants to be mad at you, Amara. Yes, you almost killed me that night, but I trained my entire life to fight demons; being killed by one would be the least surprising way to die. I said this before, but what hurt the most was the betrayal, the thought that my best friend had turned into a demon and decided to ruin my life simply because of what I was. When I left the Palace that night, clinging to life in the back of an ambulance, I wasn’t afraid. I was confused.”
Amara sniffed, then rubbed her eyes quickly. “I don’t understand, Vee.”
“All I know is the Church, Amara. I lived my entire life thinking I understood everything about not just the world, but all of creation. I know what happens when we die, I know that angels are real, all I have to do is protect humanity from evil. I spent years training, learning everything I could about the different types of demons, but one thing was always stressed above all else: demons are heartless, ruthless, soulless monsters. They will not hesitate to kill, and always pick the path of greatest misery. Except you didn’t, Amara. Not only did you not kill me, but you saved my life in the end.”
“The confusing thing was that I didn’t kill you?” Amara asked.
“I mean, yeah. For weeks, I didn’t know what it meant. Was it a trick? Did you have a secret, even more terrifying fate in store for me? According to the Church, that was the only explanation. Then, after weeks of you texting me, I return to campus to see that you’d cleaned up the Palace. Why? Why would a demon raise money for charity? The simplest answer was also the most impossible; you felt bad about what happened.”
“Is that really so hard to believe?”
“Amara, if I had accepted that you genuinely felt bad about that night, that would mean accepting that the Church was wrong about demons. But how could the Church be wrong? My existence is literally ordained by God, what does it mean if it’s all a lie?”
“Vee, I… fuck, I had no idea. I thought you were just mad because I almost killed you, I didn’t realize it was so much more than that.”
“Then, in the middle of all my confusion, you showed up asking for help with the cult. I was hesitant to believe you, but ultimately, I knew I needed to try and stop even more demons from being summoned.” Vee was pulling her blanket as tight as she could, even burying her chin in the fleece.
“I’ll admit, I didn’t even think about how hypocritical it all sounded until Tessa told me what you two talked about. Asking you to stop those demons but leave me alone.”
“It was really fucking confusing, Amara. I was scared it might be a ploy to, I dunno, steal my soul, or offer me up as sacrifice to an even bigger demon in a bid for power. Every step of the way, though, the most obvious answer was that you were genuinely trying to work with me. I finally decided to trust you, and, well, you know the rest.”
A question sat on the tip of Amara’s tongue, but she hesitated. She didn’t want to be insensitive, or push Vee too far, but she finally decided to speak up. “What about now? How do you feel about the Church?”
Vee stayed quiet, burying herself even further in her cocoon. When she eventually responded, her voice was quiet, muted by the blankets “I don’t know, and that scares the shit out of me.”
Although she had no idea if it was a good idea or not, Amara slowly reached out and placed her hand on Vee’s arm. “Vee, I’m scared too. I don’t know what being a demon means, and I’m barely holding on. I think that’s why I let my anger get the best of me. I’m sorry I’ve been so nasty these last few days, and… I want to try and be better. To make this work.”
After a slow nod, Vee spoke up again. “There’s still a lot I need to unpack, and it’s not like this conversation is going to fix everything overnight. I really appreciate you opening up to me, but I need time to think.”
“How about I make us some food, and we’ll talk about something stupid and pointless until we go to sleep.” Amara pulled her hand back, smiling at Vee.
“I’d like that. Something cold, please; you need to conserve your strength.”
Amara got up, took a deep breath, and headed for the kitchen. She had not been ready to have that conversation, yet somehow, she'd endured it.
Isn’t this what I’ve always wanted? A chance to explain everything to Vee? I think I just assumed it would never happen, yet here we are. Fuck, who would have thought being stranded in Purgatory would be a good thing.
After rummaging through the fridge and the cabinets, Amara threw together a halfway respectable dinner for the two of them. They sat on the floor, slowly eating as they tried to think of less serious things to talk about. In the end, they spent quite a bit of the night talking about school and complaining about how they were missing finals week.
Amara, although she did her best to hide this fact from Vee, noticed that her sense of taste had vanished. She wasn’t the slightest bit hungry, and had only suggested making food as a way to lighten the mood and do something nice. She forced down what little food she’d given herself, but it was about as enjoyable as chewing cardboard.
By the time they finished, and Amara had moved their plates back to the kitchen, Vee was standing up to go back to bed. As she gathered up her blanket, preparing to leave the living room, she took one last look around before pausing. “Oh, shit.”
“What is it?” Amara asked.
“My wards, the ones at the edge of the apartment, they’re burning out. Fuck!” Vee moved to a corner of the room and pointed out the fading Enochian Runes to Amara.
“Shit. What can we do about that?”
“That’s the thing, Amara, there’s nothing we can do. Normally I use my book to reinforce them, but that’s not an option. If I use my own power, there’s no way I’ll be able to fight the next time a reaper shows up. While they’ve still got some juice in them, if they crap out in the middle of the night, they won’t be able to keep the reapers out.”
“So, we’re fucked?”
“Well, not yet. I layered the wards in this place, and the outer wards are the weakest. However, that means…” Vee hesitated, struggling to finish her sentence. “Um, it means you’ll have to start sleeping in my room.”
“Oh, that’s not so bad. I was prepared for something way scarier,” Amara said. She looked at Vee, who seemed nervous for some reason, but gestured for her to lead the way.
Vee turned towards the hallway, and soon they were entering her bedroom. Amara had seen this room countless times back in the real world, but her presence here now had an unspoken significance to it. Things were still rocky between the two of them, but Amara was starting to feel like they’d taken the first steps to rebuilding their friendship.
She was also faced with a far more mundane problem, one that she hadn’t bothered thinking about until now. Vee lived in an apartment complex that mirrored Amara’s, and so their places were virtually identical. This meant that the bedroom, while not small, could only comfortably fit a single bed. As soon as this thought crossed Amara’s mind, she looked at Vee, who was clearly thinking the same thing. They both looked at Vee’s bed, pushed into a corner just like Amara’s, as the silence between them grew awkward.
“I’ll, uh, go grab my blankets and everything from the living room,” Amara said. “I’m more than happy to sleep on the floor. I don’t need the warmth, and then I’ll have plenty of space to spread my wings.”
Vee cleared her throat quickly. “Right, uh, that sounds good.”
Neither girl said much as they both got ready for bed. Today had been incredibly strange, and Amara had a feeling they both wanted to do whatever they could to give themselves more time to think about everything they'd talked about. Amara set up a tiny nest on the floor, taking full advantage of the space by stretching out her wings, and made herself comfortable. She watched Vee do the same, but she was also piling her bed with more blankets than Amara had ever seen in her life.
They both settled in, said goodnight, and tried to find some rest.
Amara couldn’t stop thinking about their conversation in the living room. Had she not been incredibly sore from her fight earlier today, she guessed that conversation would have kept her up all night. Of course, it didn’t help that she could feel her body fading. This had been her third day without sex, and in addition to the loss of her taste, she could feel a similar apathy preparing to steal her ability to sleep. If nothing else, her sore body kept her focused, and she had a feeling she had at least one good night’s sleep in her.
As her eyes closed, her breathing calmed, and she felt the night start to take her, she heard a strange noise coming from Vee’s bed. Despite the massive pile of blankets, and the powerful Enochian Wards, Vee was shivering.
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Well, I said they were going to have a conversation, didn't I? It ended up being quite the talk, and hopefully it landed the way I intended.
Miscommunication has always been the biggest issue between Vee and Amara, so there's a lot of pressure to really nail this scene, as it's the first time they have a serious heart-to-heart about everything. In a perfect world, this conversation should address the following points.
Why Amara has been acting so rude this Book.
Amara's current thoughts about herself.
Vee's inner conflict, and why she lashed out in Book One.
Why Vee continued acting rude throughout Book Two, and why she hesitated to trust Amara.
Their thoughts about each other right now. Specifically, that they both do want to be friends, but are struggling with how to make that work.
What problems they'll face moving forward if they try to be friends again.
No pressure, right?
Honestly, I'm really happy with how it turned out, but it's a heavy read. I've probably gone over this chapter more than any other chapter I've written. I've literally been picturing bits and pieces of this conversation ever since I started the series, and pretty much every point I wanted to touch made it to the page. That being said, there are a few small things that I'd like some outside opinions on.
Firstly, Amara sharing her perspective on the events of Book One and her transformation. In my head, she starts explaining this because she wants there to be context before she answers Vee's question (Why can't she fly?). Did that come across? I don't want this to come across as Amara jumping into a huge monologue for no reason. Of course, she might also be using this as an excuse to finally open up to Vee, as this is the conversation she's always wished she could have.
Additionally, on the same topic, I also felt it was important to see Amara explain everything because we get to see Vee's reaction. She's genuinely interested, and keeps creeping closer to Amara as the story continues. To me, that's reason enough to keep that section as is, but please let me know if something didn't land right.
Secondly, on a bigger scale, I put a lot of effort into making the conversation flow smoothly from one point to the next. Ideally it all feels natural, and there's a logic to why they're both sharing the information they are.
Thirdly, I want this chapter to also hint at how their friendship might work moving forward. This conversation isn't born from hatred, it's born from frustration and miscommunication. If it feels like they hate each other, then I've messed something up.
That's all I'm going to say about their conversation, as if I keep typing it'll just be random anxieties. I trust y'all to share what works and what doesn't.
Lastly, as an unrelated note, hopefully Chloé's section at the beginning felt appropriate for her character. She's finally had a run-in with a certain pesky journalist, and that might not be a great thing for her. Let me know if any leaps in her logic feel out of place, or anything like that.
Thank you, as always, for all your help! I'm ridiculously excited for this chapter to go live, but also to continue the story after it.
Nyx <3
Comments
Nyx Nyghtingale
(You're fine! Mobile is weird.) Thanks for clarifying! I was just curious how much of the information was intentional vs. unintentional on my part. Amara's reasons for her behavior, for example, are multifaceted and it's nice to see that everyone has different opinions as to why she's acting the way she is. The nature of Vee's powers, on the other hand, is absolutely a new piece of information that I purposely withheld.
AFanofRoses
(I'm not used to commenting on mobile) Sorry for the late response, I've been doing a lot of traveling recently. I hadn't realized how much Vee and the audience doesn't know about her Angelic powers. Amara has a limited skillset, but as far as we know she can't lose her powers by misusing them. It was a revelation to me that Vee may or may not have a kind of guardian angel / judge watching her waiting to either take away her magic and/or outright kill her. I also never put the dots together (no matter how blatantly they were put together for me) that Amara was being mean to Vee because Amara wanted to become the thing Vee saw her as. I just thought Amara was done trying to be nice to Vee after being rejected so many times and after Amara let her demon side out on the night of the ritual.
Nyx Nyghtingale
Good catch! Definitely not a great place to have a typo XD
Jeff
Found a typo for you. “Every time I look at you, I’m reminded how easy it is for me hurt people.” Should be ‘for me TO hurt people.’
Nyx Nyghtingale
Out of curiosity, you say some points were raised that you hadn't considered before. Did you have any examples?
Nyx Nyghtingale
There's defintely a lot up in the air right now! I've got a lot of things I'm planning to explore the rest of the book, I'll certainly need the time
Jeff
It seems inevitable that Amara and Vee will end up having sex, if for no other reason than Vee would see it as a necessary way to support her friend if not an actual desire for intimacy, but that raises questions once it happens. Will the demon be able to draw power from the angel? So far Vee’s power has been pretty toxic to Amara. Would Vee’s Patron be able to see that she’s been “tainted” by a demon and would that cause larger consequences for her? And so on. Chloé is going to be hurt that everyone has been avoiding her, and if Tessa and Nick sit her down and explain the whole truth of where Amara and Vee went, she may be very very hurt that she was continually lied to.
AFanofRoses
Also, it's going to get hectic when Chloé finds out what's been happening to her friends over the last few months. I understand that they wanted to protect her from all of the supernatural phenomena, but she'll discover the truth eventually, and I predict that she'll rightfully feel some feelings about being the only one in the main friend group who was completely left in the dark.
Nyx Nyghtingale
I have yet to clarify what organization Vee is referring to when she mentions The Church. This is something that will come up later!
Sturstryk
Also, has it been specified which "church" Vee has been referring to? I assumed the Catholic Church, since they're kinda the go-to for this sort of thing in fiction, though I'm not sure if that's quite been confirmed.
Sturstryk
While it's very likely that the vast majority of demons aren't kind-hearted co-eds who just wanna live life, take their finals, and have lots of delicious, enthusiastically consenting sex, there's the fact that what the church has gotten wrong about Amara has been REALLY wrong. Like how succubi have to kill their prey and devour their victims' souls. I can't imagine Amara isn't the only succubus living off just sexual energy while keeping a fully sustainable and renewable food source, which allows for a low profile and much fewer murder / missing persons cases. I have a hard time believing that an organization as old, well-funded, and backed with supernaturally powerful patrons, would somehow be able to miss a tidbit like that, especially if a relative novice like Vee was able to just stumble upon one. Not necessarily impossible: ethical succubi might have an iron-clad "veil" that Amara just happened to fall through the cracks of. And it's possible that Amara is a completely unique anomaly and no other succubi are able to feed off of anything but souls, or otherwise have all chosen to feed on souls often enough that the church believes that that is their exclusive diet. But occam's razor suggests otherwise.
AFanofRoses
First things first. This may be my favorite chapter of yours yet. It may be extreme to say that my kink is when characters dish out some angry, cathartic, well-deserved truth, but I will stand by that. I have a favorite type of character interaction, and I don't care who knows it. This kind of raw, messy, complicated, emotional, very real exchange is, to me, a payoff every bit as rewarding as a fight with the bad guys. Next, both of the big conversations between Vee and Amara felt great! Every bullet point you listed was given weight and focused on. Some points I already mostly pieced together before this Chapter, some points I thought I knew but it turned out that I misread the situation, and some points I hadn't even thought about before. In every case, I followed what they said and it all felt right to me. Everything in those conversations felt like it belonged, and every part flowed smoothly from one topic to the next (to me, at least). Those conversations are a huge part of this Chapter, and I think you absolutely crushed it! You also deserve praise for your portrayal of Chloé. It's awesome to see a trans character written like Chloé is! Nothing feels either glossed over or fixated upon (assuming that an in-depth masturbation session is par for the course with this series). She's just a person, and I can feel the same sorts of real-world energies in her that I feel in all of your characters. You've mentioned here that you're trans yourself, and I hope you continue normalising marginalized communities through your work!
AFanofRoses
I think one question that hasn't been answered is if the Church is, in fact, misinformed. As it stands in the series right now, the audience (we) don't know how much of an anomaly it is that Amara is still a fundamentally good person and also a demon. It's possible that what's happening to her has never happened before. In my opinion, one of the more compelling aspects of Amara's and Vee's conflict is the fact that Vee had legitimately good reason to distrust a demon.
Sturstryk
Oh, I had no illusions that this would be Amara and Vee's last heart-to-heart and that it had somehiw fixed everything: you're a much better writer than that. And yeah, if Vee does finally accept that the church lied -- or at least was grossly misinformed -- about demons then it'll probably lead to her questioning a LOT more things the church told her that she, up to this point, just accepted and took for granted. I just assumed that Vee would probably try to postpone the existential crisis-inducing questions until they aren't in the planar realm that inspired Steven King's _The Langoliers_.
Nyx Nyghtingale
I briefly mentioned this in another comment, but I believe I forgot to clarify that this conversation is only the beginning. There's going to be several chapters of Amara and Vee slowly talking more and more, sharing their thoughts and fears. Right now, we ended up spending more time with Amara talking about her transformation, since that was pretty much where everything started. We are absolutely going to be learning more about Vee as well, but she just needs a bit of time to process everything.
Nyx Nyghtingale
Unfortunately for our little group, Tessa is the one interacting the most with Chloé, and she doesn't have a great track record when it comes to believably lying! I'll admit, I didn't even once think about the possible confusion of Chloé using that particular sex toy. I'm also glad the conversation felt believable, but one thing I might not have clarified is that this isn't the end. Amara and Vee are going to continue sharing information in upcoming chapters. And good idea about the food! I didn't event think about that!
Ryan
Honestly, the fact that she needs a powerful magical artifact to actually use most of her magic.....isn't really a good sign for her being a proper angel.
Sturstryk
I also love how, for Vee, a friendly relationship with a demon isn't not just a matter of cognitive dissonance on a world-view, entire perception of reality scale, but also a fear that it could be a literal existential threat. It also really makes me wonder about what Vee actually is. Is she actually a full-fledged angel, or just a human with an affinity for divine energies whom the church claims is an angel? Was Vee born from human parents or was materialized/incarnate into her current form? Does Vee have any evidence that she's an actual, literal angel aside from what the church and, presumably, her angelic patron has told her? There are a lot of questions surrounding Vee's origin and being, many of which I'm dead positive she does NOT want to entertain at the moment but are probably prima material for future books.
Sturstryk
I think the conversation welt really well. It very much felt like the aggressive parts were fueled by frustration and confusion rather than hatred, and letting these two finally get to explain themselves to each other felt incredibly cathartic, especially the revelatory parts for each of them when something finally clicked that they hadn't even considered before about each other. As for the flow of the conversation, I think it felt quite natural. Amara going into everything from the start of her "demon puberty" felt less like her purely giving context (though that did still feel part of it) and more like her finding a sliver of a hope of Vee maybe being her best friend again, since she actually asked sonething about her with genuine interest, and dumping everything she's wanted to say and tell her bestie since all of this started. Which, I think, works even better, because Amara IS desperate to have her best friend back, or at least for her former best friend to at least know what she's going through. But yeah, absolutely LOVED this chapter and am incredibly excited to see where the story goes.
Ryan
I'll be honest, I saw "magic wand" and immediately assumed Chloe was a magic girl. Oops! And another oops! on behalf of miscommunication yet again, this time isolating Chloe entirely too much. Good luck Chloe, hope it works out soon :c And I think the conversation works! There's a few bits I wish they would touch on (like Amara accidentally framing Vee for assault). But I'm not sure if there's a good place for that without interrupting the flow. Finally, maybe they should take some food into the bedroom too?
