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Wizard's Tower - Arc 2 - Chapter 47

🕑 Added 2021-08-12 16:31:00 +0000 UTC

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Or "shock and fear"

"that had pieced the shriveled heart" Should probably be "pierced"

Enkelados

So bi knows of the tea, but failed to communicate fragus' solution?

Zarik0

Nice chapter and the last line is ;)

Jason Hornbuckle

"I had long ago my lesson in trying to free a person who didn’t want it and didn’t seek to repeat it. " "learned" should be in there somewhere

Jason Hornbuckle

"Beside the pyromancer, the Sister of Elora paused in her administrations to stare in shock fear." Prob should be "shocked" fear

Jason Hornbuckle

"It was as if I only had to consider to person and they would arrive before me." "to" should be "a" I guess, but he wasn't actually considering her when she came in so you might want to add him considering her too.

Allanther

Fixed, thanks!

Jason Hornbuckle

"The Count, with his pig-nose, looked to have seen some battle himself. His previously polished armor was dented and scratched, but he showed no sign of injury himself." Same here. I would lose one of those "himself"s

Jason Hornbuckle

"If the other fifth-tier mages had items of interest, then I would be interested." That's kind of clunky. Maybe replace the first "interest" with a synonym


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