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Chapter 82: Ambush and Assassination. [Release Version]

🕑 Added 2020-07-04 23:59:55 +0000 UTC

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Diego Rossi

Maybe Hestia poison was modified so it will trigger only under some circumstance? Like some kind of big power up.

Diego Rossi

I thin there is a "see" missing in this prase, I added it between square brackets: and my newly acquired [Admiration] were passive skills so as long as they could [see] me

Truth

As for my concerns, besides the misspelling of the new name for Imperial Hellfire spell, they are the following: 1. Like [Royal Etiquette] or [Sword Mastery], shouldn't [Admiration] be a passive skill? 2. Is [Air Shield] a buff spell? I thought it was a defense spell, but I can't recall its description. Well, even if it is exactly a buff spell, I can admit that [Synergist's Oath] might work with it as long as the spell has a passive duration. 3. Won't the [Primal Shadowstalker Claws] and [Primal Shadowstalker Fangs] end up changing when Saori ends up changing into different racial route? I would suggest [Deadly Fangs], [Mysterious/Silent Claws], or anything else that's a bit less specific. Otherwise, AbyssRaven-sama will need to mutate the skills into new version whenever she evolves into the Garm evolution route, Moon Chasing Wolf route, or whatever other route that's not of the Cadejo route. 4. I can't help it, but may I suggest an alternative names for the [Dreadflame/Hellblade Dragon] skill? I am not completely sure whether the newly evolved skill is meant to fuse both evolutions or whether it is meant for something more. However, despite whether you are trying to fuse three options into one or something else entirely, I would like to suggest the following alternative names: Chaos Hellfire Dragon, Crimson/Sentry Purgatory Dragon, Noxious Dreadflame Dragon, or Angelic Blight Flame Dragon. 5. Is it really alright to fuse non-magic and magic skills in such a way? To create a magic based on the theme of poisonous flames is definitely cool and has a lot of potential, but I feel like this specific type of magic would require more than just Fire Affinity. Hestia might have some difficulties with the new skill because of her titles. 6. Assuming that both [White Flames] and [Corrosive Fire] are types of magic skills (despite not having magic in their names, wouldn't [Corrosive Fire] still be a dangerous type of forbidden magic? The fusion of [Toxin Secretion] indicates that the skill can make poison from/within the body, and with Hestia's Mana Pool, we can only hope that the skill doesn't drain absurd amounts of nutrients from her body or affect her body constitution too badly. Well, if the skill level rises in the future, I know that the latter issue will definitely affect her body with at least one dangerous skill.

Truth

Lol. I like this chapter a lot. Saori was especially brilliant, though I admittedly hoping that she the [Assassinate] skill despite how sloppy she was. Lol. Still, I think it is too early to conclude that Hestia was the only one responsible for his poison, since I am suspicious as hell at how rhino dude drunk the potion right before he starting to die......... Why to I feel like there is a cover up going on? I already had my suspicions about why a slaver would risk the ire of the nobility too, but...... maybe, I am just paranoid

About the language part, don’t forget that Hestia understood everything the moment she got identify and used it on the first loving beings to see their status board. The system will accommodate the language differences like Truth said. However, i’m pretty sure people will question what language Symphonie Des Feuergottes

Truth

In my opinion, it would be a problem if the System can't accommodate other languages. Don't forget that there are other continents that don't use Common Tongue yet still had magic. Wouldn't there a whole lot of problems if the Divine System doesn't recognize most of the languages of the whole (if we assume that there are at least 3 languages)? Rather than that, I think it makes more sense for a continent to decide on a popular language and then use it as the common language for writing magic.

Imp

Well, then! This was a bit of a ride! And quite the long chapter too! Cliffhanger is... well, pretty huge. But, there's a lot of words before that I wanted to touch on first. Opening, we have Hestia and the giant saurian getting the prisoners out. I was under the impression there was over a dozen or so captives; big guy to fit everyone on him - kind of threw me a bit there. It occurs to me that Hestia really shows her arrogance and inexperience here dealing with Mack, in a couple ways. She really is quite the hasty girl; a good combination with the over-planner Saori. Speaking of Saori, her fight against the rhino man was pretty bad ass. I find that I'm really enjoying her perspective chapters. She's really got that icy assassin vibe going on, even when she's thinking of the past as a teacher. Using her strings, Hestia's poison (oh no! Best skill is gone! Saori, save toxic secretion! You're our only hope!), and more. And its a pretty rare battle where Identify actually matters to the outcome; those don't show up in LitRPGs very much, despite the cliches. You know, I was kind of happy a bit that Tasi hit 50 and Saori hit 69. "Almost caught up!" Ha! Naive. I'm actually a bit concerned about this ending, more so just because its such a huge violation of a person, mind rape effectively. She's lost a lot as a result of this violation, and forcing her down a path not of her own choosing is... icky. I admit I'm a bit worried about how this abuse will be handled. "Symphony of the Fire God" is a bit weird in Germany. Why is the System acknowledging a title in a different language, if it runs on Common? That seems a bit strange to me.

Termac

Oh, no.

Comiak

Dantero's in a whole lotta trouble. Can't imagine Kargy and Lightbulb being pleased with that, which makes me question what his punishment is going to be.

Just saying but she hasn’t lost all her healing spells yet. She still has [Major Heal]. While it doesn’t make sense that a low level fire mage would be able to do it, it would make sense if a God of Fire would do it.

ShadeByTheSea

super bummed about her losing her healing abilities. It doesn't even make sense that a low level fire mage made her lose her mind and humanity. Looks like another dragon story turn evil and all fire and brimstone.

CHoobler

Noooo! “The Cliff” it hurts! And with that of the way it will be interesting to see the reactions, consequences, and overall the literal fallout of this spell

Danterno*, and yes, Aurena won't be too thrilled at all. Also it isn't "divine blessings" that will be detrimental to her but "divine missives", the text that Aurena sent her. White Flame and Corrosive Fire. Her path to differentiate herself from ordinary fire mages starts here.

Yeah, the ending right now is what I wanted as it would lead into not only her next evolution but it will also give Hestia a good reason to seriously dabble into Custom Spells and improving her craft as a mage. However, I do think that your feedback is correct.Hestia is currently in a "pinball" situation where she doesn't know much about the world and has no knowledge on hte overarching plot. Things like the lizardmen where Hestia was the one to drive the plot forward until the Wyverns came, won't be last I promise. I am planning for Hestia to start putting herselfo n the wheel once the starts understanding what is around her. Just like the reader, Hestia doesn't know a lot of the world and currently in a state of learning. Also, I'll keep that in mind about the "corrupted" and "pinball" protag trope. I'll avoid that in the future, thanks.

Kevin Caffrey

I would like to offer what I hope is a bit of constructive feedback. The story has a bit of a “Pinball Protagonist” trope going on, where Hestia doesn’t have a lot of agency in her actions: she is constantly being jerked around by stronger monsters and gods. For me, this chapter crosses a line that just doesn’t sit right. I think the “corrupted MC” trope can be ok, and “pinball protagonist” trope likewise has its place, but when combined it feels pretty frustrating as a reader as the MC has very little to no control over the direction of the plot. I have to imagine you’re unlikely to change the ending of this chapter at this point, especially since you’ve been foreshadowing that the fire god is up to something, but I thought I would give my feedback anyway!

Andy

Oh my, the interference from the God of fire not only pushed Hestia over the edge but also made her lose a lot of her frequently used light magic. Wonder if she'll get beefed up versions of those spells from White Flame magic later once she settle down. Also Daterno, if I remember his name correctly, is going to be in quite a bit of trouble once the goddess of light finds out what he did. Also I think I remember reading in a previous chapter that anymore divine blessings would be detrimental to her.


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