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Chapter 146: Aftermath of the Alchemist Raid. [Release Version]

🕑 Added 2021-02-26 05:42:49 +0000 UTC

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Ahh, the comment was due to the first draft which I consider not good enough in quality.

bob barker

...I didn't find anything wrong with the chapter. The usual spelling and grammar errors, but nothing aside from that.

Hmm, got it. I will take that in consideration when with the next draft.

Diego Rossi

Something suddenly came to my mind that I believed I had forgotten until this point, but I can take care of it later. I took out a sheet of parchment and placed it with the letter back into the envelope, and then gave it back to Lily. “Please, tell Amadeus to stay safe, alright?” - I suppose that the sheet of parchment is the song she performed for him, the one for which he asked the music. I don't know if all people will remember that. - "Something suddenly came to my mind that I believed I had forgotten until this point, but I can take care of it later. I" instead seems to refer to something different. - Why she is returning his letter? I am a pack-rat,but I will keep it, a remember of a bittersweet end. In Hestia position, I will keep a lot of mementos, especially with the troubles with the memory of her old life. I would keep close my new memories.

Diego Rossi

Thanks for the chapter. "unlike the usual two our group usually encounters." a bit of repetition, you could use "unlike the two our group usually encounters." or "unlike the usual two our group encounters." "Francesca, the yellow-eyed if the twins, " -> "Francesca, the yellow-eyed of the twins,"

Saori would love it.

And Hestia has the drugs (Coffee Tea) for him.

Frostbutt

I can’t wait to see the reunion!

ShimizuA

About time we meet our caffeine addict again.


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