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Chapter 238: Griffonpeak in Danger. [Release Version]

🕑 Added 2021-10-26 23:51:24 +0000 UTC

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Missed a few words when I wrote it.

True enough. Thanks.

Diego Rossi

he could probably provoke one or them to have them send in stronger things to kill. -> he could probably provoke one OF them INTO sending in stronger things to kill. I think it will sound better.

Diego Rossi

"Unable to see here, this aurora covered the whole planet of Peolynca and acted as a defense against the threat outside, including anything from the dimension the Origin Gods formally came from." A bit awkward in a couple of points. I think the first phrase meant that the aurora can't be seen from Peolynca. Then: "the dimension the Origin Gods formally" maybe "the native dimension of the Origin Gods" will sound better.

Diego Rossi

goneover -> gone over "“Why are you speaking of the cardinal, Lady Hestia?” Saori asked." Lord Helvas that asked the question, as confirmed by Saori reply. Hamil has been interacting with the cardinals. - cardinal (single)


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