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Chapter 257: Making Allies through Politics. [Release Version]

🕑 Added 2021-12-17 21:48:53 +0000 UTC

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Diego Rossi

Good changes in the second draft. Good work.

Diego Rossi

It was good to read. Having a credible world background is something I really like. But I agree with the others that two chapters on politics are enough.

Good to know. Getting politics believable is harder than it looks without making the chapter too dry. But, yeah, more than two chapters of politics is very hard on my brain.

Hmm, I see. I could juice it up with more Hestia monologues. It is dry without her quips. I included that line because i had a feeling that was the case.

Politics is hard to right, yeah.

Diddyz7

The politics were handled well enough that it was believable, and that is the important part, no one was being a dick just to be a dick, and they made deals and compromised, which is half of what politics is. Overall sir, good job, but I would do more than 2-3 chapters of politics in a row, as that can be tedious.

Erik R

Felt a little heavy, or perhaps I'm just too sleepy to comfortably follow the story. Not that it's bad, I like the chapter a lot. Maybe if you sprinkled a couple more of those Hestia's internal monologues like the "muhaha backstab them all". It felt like a breath of fresh air to me :P

Alphafenrir401

I think you handled it well enough politics will always be hard


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