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Chapter 285: Vampires. [Second Draft]

🕑 Added 2022-02-23 23:37:30 +0000 UTC

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Ronnie Bankston

Your fine on pacing. It seems slow on intial read through because you have to explain so much about new environments,politics, races. Ect. Your actual going over a lot. When hestia first entered artorias there was a similar ease up on pace. Which is fine. A new arc is usually supposed to have a slower pace and less dramatic tension than the final act of the previous one. And that's OK.

Yeah, a lot is happening, and I've been opening more and more story lines

Their time will come, well, once again since they are the main chars.

Well, that is a relief to read. I had some concerns if this arc was getting stale or if the pacing was terrible.

Diego Rossi

Liking it so far. Ronnie and Kale have done a good analysis that mostly applies to me too. I like seeing the Magical Biscuit and Misfits characters development and will like some side story on them again in the not too far future, but don't think that now is the right time for that. A lot is happening, so adding more peripheral stuff should wait.

Kale Daley

Really liking it so far. Starting to see a few of the players that have been working behind the scenes for a while. Also liking Hestia and Saori learning a bit more about their monstrous sides. Them actually training up their skills with people who can actually give them pointers has been nice as well. I think the balance you've struck integrating the other transmigrators into the story has been fine. I personally am here mainly for Aurora proper so them popping in and out of relevance works fone for me. I was hoping we'd get a bit more progress towards mastering Battle Frenzy and finding out exactly what Belzac wants with Saori but it hasn't been that long so I'm fine with where we are now. All in all I'd say the direction so far has been good. Looking forward to what around the bend ^^b

Ronnie Bankston

I'm am personally enjoying it. My biggest worry when it started was that there would be a decrease in writing quality due to the amount of characters present. Everybody needs their screen time. But it seems to be getting handled well. Even Elrick, Daichi and Grimnir who have gotten relatively less development previously have gotten spotlight this arc. While the overall pacing hasn't suffered. Your still fleshing out the world as well. Races like vampires, a merchant republic, God descent, and legal slavery are all topics you started working with this arc. It keeps the story fresh. Your doing a real good job. If had a criticism (it's not big criticism) I would say the weakest part of this arc has been hestias and saori own development. Hestia being a isekai protagonists reckoning with her past life. And saori having conflicts with who the the students and who she herself became. But I think we just aren't there yet in the story and those seem to be longer personal arcs.


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