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Chapter 344: An Unraveling Mystery into Burning Disgust. [SecondDraft]

🕑 Added 2022-08-15 03:00:31 +0000 UTC

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For the second, I think adding the Did would make it sound like she didn't expect tomorrow would come.

Pog

Diego Rossi

especially not with Tasianna or the twins around. -> especially not with Tasianna or the twins AWAY. or especially when neither Tasianna nor the twins are around. And then the next had come. -> And then the next DAY DID come.

brunoid

Thanks for the chapter


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