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Chapter 326: The Flag of Resistance. [Third Draft]

🕑 Added 2022-06-14 02:20:00 +0000 UTC

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Hmm, alright. Understood, I'll correct it.

Oliver Wolfe

I gotta say, Hestia being so willfully ignorant of her mom’s music comments is getting annoying. She’s now heard her mom mention it three times, I believe, and all three times has blown it off in a way rather out of character for someone who cares for her mother and lives in large part for music. If this is foreshadowing, I would suggest editing these moments to being something Mom says to herself where only she, the reader and the narrator are around - that way we know it’s important but aren't dragged out of our suspension of disbelief by the repeated instances of Hestia having seemingly plot-enforced blindness to this point.

Diego Rossi

Which meant, the two knights he brought were not guarding the glacier. -> NOW guarding

Knife, knife.

Frostbutt

Every human so sus


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