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843. Tree Station 8

🕑 Added 2023-07-10 16:04:18 +0000 UTC

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IceHeart

In " "They just started to move,3 the chimera captain said" the 3 should be a quotation mark. "Karina said, stopping to control to feed energy into the" feels like you had multiple ideas for the sentence and they ended up mashed together in an incomplete sentence and should probably be reworked. In "Their tailor-made closely hang loosely" should be clothes instead of closely. In "we have to get rif of the tree first" rif should be rid.


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