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🕑 Added 2022-07-05 15:01:02 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

- I'm not sure if who's better, Deen who intends to do the right thing but using the wrong way, or Erind who doesn't care about right or wrong lol. But Deen will surely be safe no matter the consequences because of Gabe. - If there's the reality wedge, Gabe will calculate it coming in the future and will tell her to leave the place. But once it's up, Gabe can't do anything. - I'm not actually sure what Deen would do if Erind makes her own organization. It might be too cliche if Deen fights for the "good" side. But that would also be more dramatic. - Ooooh, that's right. I forgot about that Erind demonstrated it to her. Good catch, I'll edit this here. - Yeah, Deen was joking she can't add a simple 6+3. I've actually thought whether to have more connection with these dead guys, but it might ruin the sort of feel of this side arc that it's a random encounter and Erind is getting more carefree. If this has more weight to the plot, it would seem almost contrived. - Deen was trying to vibe with Adumbrae Erind. Like "see, we kill people together". Something like that. - I haven't got much time to go over my messages and all that hahaha. Thanks for the help! I'll slowly check all sites over the next few days. And thanks for the help proofreading!

OmniHumanist

Typos: I think I got the hang of snapping necks...or not?Was there any video on the internet about this? Was I using the correct technique? -> I think I got the hang of snapping necks...or not? Was there any video on the internet about this? Was I using the correct technique? Before we left her house, I was teasing her for her over-preparedness like we were going camping for a few days instead of like half a day of driving. -> Before we left her house, I was teasing her for her over-preparedness like we were going camping for a few days instead of going half a day driving. The small hills behind me seemed to be concentrating the flow of the wind, blasting it straight at me. -> The small hills behind me seemed to be blasting the wind straight at me. Same with BID agents, mutants, monsters, whatever those fuckers who trashed my condo building were supposed to be -> Same with BID agents, mutants, and monsters, whatever those fuckers who trashed my condo building were supposed to be. To me who disliked physical contact, it seemed like millennia. -> To me, who disliked physical contact, it seemed like millennia. Was that supposed to make us closer by showing we were on the same boat killing people? -> Was that supposed to make us closer by showing we were on the same boat with regards to killing people? ----- An annoying trait at times, but also occasionally useful as she defined her own justice and didn’t simply follow what was socially acceptable -> Well, the road to hell is paved with good intentions. Though I'm not sure if Deen could receive much punishment given Gabe is protecting her. I wonder how her power works when one of the reality wedges is involved. Can Gabe calculate that or does the wedge prevent Gabe from seeing there is an issue? That could lead to a funny end - Gabe couldn't warn Deen about the wedge and gets blown up by BID weaponry. She'd surely be a very, very loyal pawn. And useful too, especially with her Guardian Angel. -> It'll be interesting to see how far Deen goes for Erind. If Erind goes down the full villain route with her own organization, will Deen ever take a stand or will she support it lol? Oh yeah, Deen didn't know that my Blanchette body completely replaced my human one, clothes and all that. She probably assumed that I stole Blanchette’s revealing clothes from someone at the Eve arena? -> Objection! Deen saw Erind transform in the 3rd epilogue of the 4th arc. She even untransformed out of Blanchette. So unless Deen is trying to fool Erind here, this is incorrect. I weakly chuckled at her joke. -> I'm not sure what the joke is? Is it supposed to be Deen is bad at math or something? On that note, it would be funny if it did turn out one of the guys was alive, and they magically appeared in Vegas. That'd be a funny idea for an Adumbrae power, they convince somebody that some other people are dead, and then gaslight the hell out of them later on when it turns out they're not dead. she said, giving me a reassuring smile -> I wonder what caused Deen to smile here? Did she have a change of heart and she actually enjoys killing people now? Also, on RoyalRoad (and I think ScribbleHub) it says you are going to release the 5th chapter of the spinoff tomorrow lol. Anyways, thanks for the chapter!

Temple (REND)

Erind might not be able to leave Deen now even if she wanted to haha

Glowy3

they are perfect together


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