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Erind/Deen - 5.18.3

🕑 Added 2022-10-05 01:44:15 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

Thanks for the help proofreading! The premium grammarly goes a bit wonky sometimes when it comes sto was/were in hypothetical scenarios, lol. - Erind can be appreciative once in awhile :D - On the front part, Erind might be thinking about boobs instead of just abdomen like she did with Deen. - Lol, that would be funny if her Mom's accompany them shopping. Although I'm not sure if I can write that scene because I have no idea how that goes. Erind's mum would probably just be happy her daughter finally has a best friend.

OmniHumanist

Typos: I watched Deen choose a part of my shirt that wasn't bloodied and tore a long strip from it. -> I watched Deen choose a part of my shirt that wasn't bloodied and tear a long strip from it. Were this like bullies giving smaller kids wedgies in school? -> Was this like bullies giving smaller kids wedgies in school? ----- "But...um...thank you." -> Hey look, Erind's getting character development. "And because cleaning the front would be weird," I pointed out. But I didn't resist as she tied my hair up. -> Deen didn't comment on this lol. In before she starts wiping Erind's front as well. Still, Erind wiped Deen's front before with a towel, so isn't Erind the weird one lol? "Please just focus on wiping!" -> Wouldn't it be funny if Erind's mom also attends the shopping? I wonder if she would pick up on Erind's and Deen's extremely touchy relationship.


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