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5.35 - Amber Deen Leska

🕑 Added 2022-10-12 12:44:13 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

- Yeah, I've actually thought of Deen eventually interacting with the other forms of Erind in the spinoff, lol. - So far, Deen thinks it's just Gabe also talking to her. I'm sure Erind thinks it's very funny. - The police are bringing in more powerful weapons. When the fight started, remember that Erind ordered Todd to throw a bunch of monsters out the window? (That's why the window is broken). The police already know there's something weird going on because the monsters attacked them. They're already preparing for an Adumbrae situation. The body Deen threw caught their attention and also was meant to trick Red Head. So when he showed up at the window, he got a missile to his face or something like that lol. Thanks for the help proofreading!

OmniHumanist

Typos: Deen stared at his feet through the tentacles she covered her body. -> Deen stared at his feet through the tentacles she covered her body with. Faster, faster, faster! -> Perhaps this should be italicized? It seems like it's part of Deen's thoughts. ----- She tried to steady her breathing. She hugged Pino's unexpectedly warm chrome head close to her chest. It was strangely comforting. -> This could be fun in the spinoff - Deen tries hugging the various transformed version of Erind. It'd also be funny to see how Erind feels held in Deen's chest as Pino. Two voices were talking to her! -> It'd be fun to see Deen seeing that it was actually Pino talking to her. White. She could only see bright light as the explosions continued. -> Do the police have like a grenade launcher lol? I don't think any of the heroes have any explosive powers rn. And idk why any of the Adumbrae would start shooting at one of their own randomly. So it's most likely some outside force that started shooting in once they saw the corpse fall out of the window and maybe saw Red Head. Thanks for the chapter!


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