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🕑 Added 2022-11-16 02:16:13 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

Thanks for the help proofreading! - Pino also has an eyeball, lol. - It'll be hard to realize Pino is Erind because for her Blanchette is Erind, and it's difficult to consider that she has more than one "secret identity." - You mean Vanessa? Erind never introduced her Blanchette part to her. If she's spying on Erind all this time, she should know about her different forms though. - Hey, Vanessa is still alive. No harm done from the headshot, lol.

OmniHumanist

Typos: The spider eyeball creature scuttled towards my right foot and looked up, locking gazes with me as if I was trying to tell me something -> The spider eyeball creature scuttled towards my right foot and looked up, locking gazes with me as if it was trying to tell me something --- Her thoughts were clear that I was more untrustworthy than the eyeball. -> RIP Erind is less trustworthy than an eyeball. “Is Mom—is Erind’s mother there?” -> Imagine if Deen realizes Pino is Erind. She chuckled. “Nope. I saw your metal body emerge out of your face. My familiar was peeking through the grates of the central air conditioning.” -> Would she still believe Erind is Red Hood? I wonder how she will reconcile this new information. “Revenge? For what? I’m just happy to meet my friend.” -> True friendship is when you shoot your friends in the head Thanks for the chapter!.

Temple (REND)

Thanks for linking it! Reading it now brings back memories.

Flying Goat

Link to A Dragon Gnawing its Tail, if anyone else is curious: https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/2797/a-dragon-gnawing-its-tail/chapter/25801/chapter-1


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