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[REND] 2.3 - New Semester, New Me

🕑 Added 2025-04-25 10:21:32 +0000 UTC

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Karp Paul

Beanie Twig then blinked rapidly. “The fuck?” - yes, Beanie Twig, I know how it feels...

Temple (REND)

Good point about the gang. They're too casual lol. Or maybe we're just judging them by their looks haha. I'll get around to editing that before the next batch of REND chapters. I think what I'll do is reduce them to three or four people, one guy is passed out drunk or something, so it's more manageable. I was trying to shorten their conversation, but it came out too expository. I'll appreciate more suggestions. I'll fix this next time. For post chapter notes, we can have a list of Rules. And then summary of Adumbrae/Corebring Lore for the mini arc maybe? Or a permanent list of Adumbrae classifications along with it. As for characters, let's think of a way to summarize things without it being too messy. Thanks for your suggestions!

Temple (REND)

- When you think about it, it's not really random in the sense that this is a cycle. Maybe the original REND version has a direct effect on this one storywise. On a meta level, it did have an effect in that we're making the first chapters more exciting. - Lol, Rofirio and his darts. Maybe we can meet Rofirio again. - Yep, we'll retain the melted icecream rule. Maybe that could be Rule 2. It seems like child Erind would think of. - I was thinking of Erind writing them down. But I'm also thinking that writing stuff down would risk her faces getting discovered, especially a diary. If Erind puts her honest thoughts on a diary, someone reading it would pick up she's not normal. - I suppose the rule making part would depend on if she writes this down or not. We need some ritual of permanence for it. Not just instantly deciding it's a rule. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

Temple (REND)

I really appreciate the support. Your support will go into building the new world of REND. It'll be worth it, especially when you'll see REND reach a high ranking on Rising Stars. :D

Temple (REND)

Erind, the comedian XD

Karp Paul

'“Harper,” said Tattoo Sleeves, thumping his chest. “What’s your name?”" - I think, the leader should introduce everyone in the group. Also, he would be using nicknames, not actual names. Smth like, "That's Mech (because he work as a mechanic, but we don't really need this backstory), that fat guy is Skinny, and I'm Harper. What's you name, little girl?" Also, there should be some banter between the thugs, maybe some mocking of each other and trying to intimidate and convince Erind to go with them. Right now, it seems like Erind is having a normal conversation, which is really weird in this situation. Sorry, I cannot give more detailed advice on this dialogue at the moment. I may come up with something later. "With Creepy Monday and New Semester, New Me (ending next chapter), I think we’ve shown what kind of person Erind is." - A general suggestion. You know how in the litrpg novels there are often mc stats at the end of the chapter, right? Why not make something similar (in nature) with REND? At the end of each miniarc you can make a small info-block. For example, you can publish a list of known/used rules, some Adumbrae lore, know members of Dario's group, known affiliates of 2Ms, etc. This would also illustrate how Erind keeps mental notes, and you won't need to explain how Erind tracks the rules - she does not need to write them down because the rules are a significant part of her already, they define her to some extent.

OmniHumanist

What happened to me was too much of a coincidence -> It's kind of funny how this is more random chance then the first version. Erind only met SpookyErind in the last version because she decided to do the egg pod test. But now, SpookyErind is here early. If a tranquilizer dart couldn’t knock out an Adumbrae, alcohol wouldn’t either. -> Erind from the old version is crying right now. Rofirio and his darts are too op. …because of Rule #10: Don’t drink alcohol. -> Another rule change :O. I think the previous one was about Erind not drinking icecream until its melted? I think Eri made fanart of that one lol. Any suggestions on how Erind would do that? Would she have written the Rules down somewhere? We should also have a way for Erind to add Rules. -> Maybe she can replace it with the melted ice cream rule lol. I guess she could have like a diary she keeps that has the rules on the first page? But the rest of it is just full of weird people observations and random thoughts instead of details from what happened to Erind today lol. It'd be a nice contrast to how YA protagonists are usually portrayed with their diary of stuff that happened. It could also allow Erind to steer off of some of her undesirable traits as a child such as harming other kids with a drum or torturing insects that have been mentioned previously. Her mother gave the diary to her as a hobby. There could be even a nice tidbit where Erind's mother tried reading it but couldn't understand the random nonsense Erind was writing. For adding rules, maybe it has to do something with Erind's obsessions. Like if Erind gets obsessed over something so much she decides to make it a Rule? Thanks for the chapter!

Krzychu0304

I jumped at the purple bloom level, I can't afford to keep this subscription for long, but I'm doing it to support the release of the new version of REND.

Brantal

lol


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