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[REND] 16.2 - Fun Alone Time

🕑 Added 2025-07-30 14:29:02 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

I added some lines about Deen teaching Erind to lie. And you're right that Erind doesn't have a type. I'll change that. Many thanks!

Karp Paul

We had a fun banter that went on for several minutes. Deen and I had planned this. The hero wannabes would think that we were adjusting to the group, that we were accepting being part of it, that we weren’t angry that they fucking forced us to meld with stupid artificial Cores. It was all a ruse. For our safety, we had to do this. For our plans to escape the clutches of the secret organization someday, we had to do this. - You can add something along the lines of "The funniest thing was... Deen being really uncomfortable about making me lie. As if she was forcing me to betray my own character." - to emphasize Erind's relationship to Deen. The table across from me had a guy studying some stuff. He was handsome, but he used highlighters, so that was automatically not my type. I could probably trick him into bombing Eve. - I didn't know Erind had a type at all... Maybe rephrase it into something like "I bet he would fall for me, and I could trick him into bombing Eve."

Temple (REND)

Thank you!

Temple (REND)

If OD bombs the place, he'll have "betrayed" the 2Ms in a way.

Beeees!

Lmao, "oh Overdrive, I need you to stay here and press this button at a certain time. No don't worry, the button just sends a signal"

Vaporus

Excellent writing, good stuff!

Temple (REND)

Lol, 'mention'. I was really sleepy writing it. Too bad Erind doesn't have her own car so she can drive beside OD.

Temple (REND)

- Lol, 'mention', 'mission'. Thanks for the help proofreading! - Having a clone would be difficult to write in the long run, mostly because Erind just wouldn't use it. The problem is that a lot of times, fighting is the solution, so it'll be Blanchette. So the Core mask will be used, I'm thinking it'll be combined or become a momentary power up. If it's a power up, it'll also help make other masks useful. Anyway, I'm still brainstorming about it. Let's see what the free readers suggestions are. - Garg-Owl and Fatalis ftw! - Maybe Erind is becoming Deen's pet since she's feeding her. - She tried sleeping in the nude once and it's becoming a habit. - Yeah, OD wasn't supposed to show up yet. But I figured, add more drama and characters to the shenanigans. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

ARIMA Maroon

Typos: In the end, Deen was adamant to be called ‘Ambriel’, and I vowed I’d call her ‘Fatalis’. -> In the end, Deen was adamant to be called ‘Ambriel’, and I vowed to call her ‘Fatalis’. My role was to watch for anything suspicious that might affect the mention, and to set off the bomb when they’d tell me to do so. -> My role was to watch for anything suspicious that might affect the mission, and to set off the bomb when they’d tell me to do so. If it exploded before that, the docks might go into lockdown as goons would leave to check on Eve. -> If it exploded before that, the docks might go into lockdown because goons would leave to check on Eve. ----- I was of the mind to try taking a pill or two later. If the Core truly had a part in reversing some of my bodily changes, I’d want to help it along, like sprinkling fertilizer on a plant. -> Perhaps this can be the ending of the first arc and how Erind gets her Core powers. Also, I was thinking of the combining Core and Adumbrae masks thing. Maybe it gets a bit too complicated? I think when Erind puts the Core mask on, it makes a separate transformed clone that she can control in addition to her main body. That way, she can use both the Core mask and an Adumbrae mask at the same time. And that prevents any of the masks from being underutilized. “I’m not using that codename even if the entire country votes,” -> I think it's better than Ambriel lol. Plus, this whole hero wannabe drama tied Deen to me. I couldn’t have wished for a better pawn to use. And I really liked the pastries she kept giving me. -> Erind is finally thinking of Deen as hers! I hurriedly undressed to check if there were any changes to my body. Nothing! Wohoo! I went to bed with a huge smile on my face. -> So Erind does go to sleep nude - Deen was right! “Overdrive? He might be on his way to Eve. Huh… He did say he wanted to help me last time.” -> Good idea with Overdrive. He can help transport any shady stuff at the 2M's base that Erind wants to keep. And then he can also drive Erind back so it looks like she was always in the right place. Thanks for the chapter!

KanadianKitsune

A most dastardly scheme

KanadianKitsune

My role was to watch for anything suspicious that might affect the mention -> My role was to watch for anything suspicious that might affect the *mission* Would be really funny if Erind puts on a face mask and makes menacing eye contact with Overdrive lmao

Metal(Liz)ard🏳️‍⚧️

Erind at the alter with Dean exchaning rings "now she'll be my minion forever!"


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