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[REND] B2. 2.2 - Campus Shenanigans

🕑 Added 2025-09-16 12:39:29 +0000 UTC

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Vaporus

Excellent writing, good stuff!

Karp Paul

The more I think of it, the less it makes sense. To the Tower cop, Erind is either a girl who lied about her being on a train during the Adumbrae attack (because she fears tests or whatever) or an Adumbrae (there is a slim chance, but still). She can not really be trusted from his perspective. She lives alone, not very connected to her mother, has very few friends - not the best profile. If she is guilty of anything, this only gives her a heads-up. And even if she is trustworthy, this is extremely dangerous, because Reo is clearly not really a human - he is either an Adumbrae or ... what are the options, really? Just a guy on steroids with some super strength? This means that sending Erind to sniff around means putting her in mortal danger, and he cannot simply do it - that would undermine his whole investigation. Even if she gets some results, she can't testify in court - that would be the end of her career - nobody would trust her as a lawyer knowing that she acted as a CI. Finally, if he suspects that somebody is an Adumbrae, and not just suspects - he saw the super stength, he should call BID. Like, what is the game plan here? To arrest and put cuffs on a guy who can easily lift a bike? A police detective would be simply not equipped to deal with it. And trying to go after an Adumbrae without proper backup means putting a ton of innocent people in danger. I get what you are trying to do here - double agent storyline like in Worm - but this has too many plot holes.

Karp Paul

twenty feet away - should be more. Twenty feet is not far enough if the goal is to have a private conversation. Also, they should not be in sight of others. Myra and I became close after that. - That's a bit too much. I would remove that sentence. We suspect so. - Why would he just admit it? As far as he knows, Erind is not clean. She might be involved with Reo somehow. And now he just admits that he suspects him of being Adumbrae. The obvious thing for her to do after this is to go to Myra and warn her about Reo (and spill this information). We still lack information. - No. It seems like they have enough to detain him and test him. You’ll be my informant. They trust you. Myra, Reo, and the others. - That is not how CI recruitment should go. And not in front of other people, even though they can't hear. Also, she is a person of interest in this case. There is a chance that she herself is an Adumbrae, so she cannot be an informant. “I don’t know who I can trust…” - Exactly!


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