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[REND] B2. 6.1 - Monster in the Labyrinth

🕑 Added 2025-10-21 13:34:38 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

- Thanks for the help proofreading! - Yep, probably in the next book there'll be Corebrings. - Myra wants to dehumanize the Adumbrae, probably. - Erind is definitely more proactive this time around. - Definitely considering this would be the time to show Pino. - Right now, Erind hadn't thought much of the cure. With this, she might realize she wants to keep the powers. - The PCM will be its own thing this time.

NeoJungleLover

Opsie Im so clumsy~~

Marquess

“If this were the movie, we should be in time to overhear important stuff.” She did, in fact, overhear important stuff! If things continue like this this, she’ll eventually start breaking the fourth wall. Also, I can’t help but think her initial destruction of the blinky machine might’ve accidentally set the Adumbrae loose…

ARIMA Maroon

Typos: Uh, I-I’m going to hurl!” I made gagging noises and spat at the ground. Too dark for them to see that I didn’t actually vomit anything. -> "Uh, I-I’m going to hurl!” I made gagging noises and spat at the ground. Too dark for them to see that I didn’t actually vomit anything. They must have a genius scientist to invent a machine that even the BID didn’t have. -> They must have had a genius scientist to invent a machine that even the BID didn’t have. “We don’t know how long until the PCM realizes they got intruders.” -> “We don’t know how long until the PCM realizes they have intruders.” ----- The next thing I’d know, there’d be Corebrings around. -> Maybe they might even come next arc! I wanted to correct Myra referring to Adumbrae as ‘it’. Did she realize what she had said? Part of her had started to accept that Kelsey might be more monster than human. -> Clearly Erind needs to teach Myra about they/them pronouns. Roping Deen into this might change her view on Adumbrae. A lot of setup was needed if I were to reveal my secret to her. -> Nice to see Erind being more proactive. It'll be fun to see Deen be more Adumbrae friendly. How about on my metal mannequin form? I assumed that the body didn’t have a brain. No headaches. -> This would be a great time to show Pino. Then Erind doesn't have to deal with the headaches and she gets to introduce her Corebring face to Deen and Myra. And then she can have fun making Deen panic having to protect her body before showing that she can control it. “A failure is but another step to success,” replied another person. A woman. “We will eventually achieve our goal of turning Adumbrae back to human.” -> One of the things we missed in the previous version was that Deen and Erind never found a cure. But if they find one in this version, it'll be fun to see what drama Erind stirs up with Deen to try and keep her powers, since in the last version, Erind said she wanted to keep her powers even if there was a cure. Whatever the PCM is doing, it might be quite different from the 2Ms' thing -> Or are they still connected? dun dun dun. But it would be fun to see the PCM be its own thing this time.


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