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[REND] B2. 16.3 - Boss Red Hood

🕑 Added 2025-12-30 13:55:55 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

That is Deen's specialty haha

Temple (REND)

Thanks for the support!

Temple (REND)

- I'll transfer that sentence about Blanchette not lying - I'll reword the sentence. Myra and Deen did suspect that the machine was doing something because it was in every exit out of the tunnels, and they saw another one. - I'll add some more explanation to Kelsey saying that RH pushed the Adumbrae away, but Deen still won't believe it because she thinks RH and Adumbrae Kelsey are working together. The reversal, that'll have to wait for Deen to observe in a future scene. - I'll also reword Deen hoping Kelsey could be saved. Probably something like she thinks it's crazy to hope - Deen's uncertainty, that's partly from seeing RH as a hero, while she's doubting Adumbrae Kelsey. - On using Blanchette "this way" it's more on Deen using Blanchette again to bait out stuff. Like she did when Blanchette covered for them against Mr. Ogre. Deen was also conflicted there. I'll clarify that in edits. - On the tech, I'll have Deen mention that the PCM might have tech against corebring because they managed to capture Myra. Erind had suspected this in a previous chapter. - The PCM aren't proceeding with the hostage thing. They probably want to present Myra to Red Hood as a gift for an alliance or something against this scarier mysterious enemy. Some spoilers for the incoming chapters. Deen and the rest don't know that the PCM knows that the Red Hood cover story isn't real. Thanks for sharing your thoughts and helping proofread!

민설

Deen is such a hypocrite lol I love it

Vaporus

Excellent writing, good stuff!

Temple (REND)

- I just realized that Deen never doubted Erind in the Prior Cycle. Deen should've thought that Erind was already taken over by the Adumbrae. - Spiky tall women haha - Keke just want to play around in this world - Yep, I'll edit that. Thanks for the help proofreading! - That's the way Erind will try to prove that she isn't an Adumbrae. I'm just surprised that this didn't become a plot point in the Prior Cycle, with Deen doubting Erind.

Temple (REND)

Thank you!

ARIMA Maroon

Typos: “I know all about those,” Myra interjected. “Do you know where they’re holding her?” -> “I know all about those,” Kelsey interjected. “Do you know where they’re holding her?” ----- Judging such a display of power, it was impossible that a shred of Blanchette’s human mind, whoever she was before, was still present. -> I'm hyped for the reveal lol. He stopped himself, realizing that Kelsey was taller than him now. -> Aww, Johann isn't a fan of tall women. Kelsey was separate from the Adumbrae—but to unleash vengeance on the PCM. -> I love how Deen comes to this conclusion after Erind tried the same think with Keke and realized that she didn't have that desire. “I know all about those,” Myra interjected. “Do you know where they’re holding her?” -> Hey look, Myra appeared again lol. Deen didn’t know anything about what Adumbrae could and couldn’t do beyond what was taught to them. And she doubted that scientists knew everything about how Adumbrae worked. -> This is also why I am hyped for the Erind reveal, since she can reveal as Pino that she can push back the Adumbrae Infection. Thanks for the chappy!

No Name

"It turned out that Blanchette wasn’t lying back at the docks." -> This sentence should probably be after Kelseys confirmation that she hasn't been with Red Hood for long. "they inadvertently damaged one of the machines that kept the imprisoned Adumbrae away." -> But it was only Erind that actually knew such devices existed, and experienced their effect. Why is Deen certain about this? Or am I not remembering some detail? “Through Red Hood’s help, I managed to regain control of my body.” -> For a more convincing stance from Kelsey, maybe note that the transformation reversed slightly (Erind mentioned a few inches, I think?) giving a concrete metric for the adums influence receding, that Deen could potentially actually observe herself in time. "A faint shard of hope that Kelsey’s mind could still be retrieved" -> A bit odd that Deen categorically rejects the possibility of Kelsey regaining control with RHs help due to no prior examples, yet clings to hope that merely seeing someone close, which presumably has happened many times with different adums, would somehow help. "she couldn’t let Adumbrae Kelsey realize that she had figured out her true nature" (and several other parts) -> Rather excessive confidence from Deen here... She's usually more open, judging RH from her actions, not from being an adum, so why is she so narrow here? And then she acts uncertain again near the end... "She was ashamed to use Blanchette this way" -> Bizarre to on one side write Blanch off as an inhuman entity which could at any moment decide to bite their heads off, and then flip-flop over to treating her like a person whose opinions on Deen matter... Core influence? "They have these machines that—” -> They experienced firsthand that these have no effect on corebring, to the point they didn't even notice they had effects; not really a critical piece of evidence that they have good tech for capturing Myra. On a more general note, the fact that the PCM is continuing with the hostage thing is a bit odd... They should have clued in that Myra wasn't one of Red Hoods once they realized she wasn't an adum, so why are they proceeding with the hostage thing? They should also have realized that they have stepped in a hornets nest - artificial corebring are something only a major faction would experiment with, considering the possible repercussions, and something where no amount of violence to silence leaks would be excessive.

Cheese Bread

Happy new year in advance

Frozzendeth

Otherwise good setup for the reveals to Deen at the end of book one or start of book two i guess :)

Frozzendeth

Spelling? Mistake: “I know all about those,” Myra interjected. “Do you know where they’re holding her?” this should be Kelsey right?


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