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[REND] B3. 1.2 - Four Bs Assemble

🕑 Added 2026-01-19 10:19:05 +0000 UTC

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Temple (REND)

- Yep, it would appear that Erind slowed down Kelsey's transformation, probably a residue of their session. - I'm not even sure if a bolt cutter can cut nails that finely. - Thanks for the suggestion about asking for powers, I'll use that. - Erind is probably thinking about the fruit limes lol. - Myra is probably exaggerating. Then again, Myra might probably steal an entire truck hahaha. - I'm going to edit this chapter, and probably massively rewrite it. I decided that Kelsey would have told Myra about Erind off-screen. The problem was there should be a confrontation, or at least tense conversations about it between Myra and Erind. We'll push a lot of content to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing your thoughts!

Temple (REND)

Erind the ultimate hater. Let the hate flow through you lol.

No Name

"Still, this was around a foot shorter than when I first met her. " -> Which is very interesting. Kelsey used her powers during the rescue, yet the transformation Erind reversed doesn't seem to have recurred. If Erinds ability also slows down further transformation, in addition to reversing it, that is a rather critical effect. "I really need to find a super heavy-duty nail cutter. " -> I'd recommend a hand-held bolt cutter. "I managed to get your consciousness back and even reversed some of your transformation" -> Subtle as a nitroglycerine sledgehammer. Maybe ask about whether using her powers caused the transformation to return, or if it actually seems to have stalled? That's actually pertinent information and makes Erind seem caring, while simultaneously pointing out what Erind actually wanted to highlight. "Did they use limes in lights in the past?" -> Is Erind here referring to the fruit, the tree, or the material? She is either right or completely off. "If it does, I swear that I’ll steal an entire truck and—” -> Rather than brazenly stealing drugs in an easy-to-get-caught way, if it turns out these drugs are useful, how about relegating the task to the literal drug lord of La Esperanza? She is sitting right there. Did Kelsey fill in Myra on Erinds secrets off-camera? Seems a bit out-of-character for Kelsey to blab about Erind being an adumbrae and a gang boss without permission. I feel like we missed a fun scene of Myra being flabbergasted.

Acrules

It does kind of feel like there’s a conversation/reaction missing from Myra, even if Kelsey’s already told her. It doesn’t feel like this is the first time Myra and Erind have met since Myra found out she was an Adumbrae and gang leader

Acrules

Erind! Your gang leader cred!!!

Vaporus

“What’s the difference between an apartment and a condominium?” I asked as Deen while we climbed the stairs of Myra’s apartment building. Her room was on the third floor. “They’re practically the same, right? I suppose that condominiums are usually taller and apartments are shorter.” - as Deen ?

Vaporus

Excellent writing, good stuff!

Brepn

Erind sitting there hating when people say cool things and grumbling about being short


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