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A Slightly Different Fight

🕑 Added 2021-10-29 15:39:16 +0000 UTC

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Maerry

No problem, I am always open for advice and will try to keep your advice/complains in mind for future chapters.

Mythicalchase

Thanks for the chapter! I have some complaints/suggestions/requests: Yuna feels like she’s becoming two-dimensional, most of the recent chapters are just of her doing something idiotic, crazy or perverted and just saying she doesn’t have commons sense and getting away with it. Although that is her character type, I feel it is occurring too much and becoming stale and cliche. I personally enjoyed when she had times like that and times where she was scheming and developing herself and her surroundings. The story also feels as if it is getting dragged on compared to the earlier chapters. I enjoyed when we’d have a chapter or so from the perspective of someone else and it gave us more insight to the rest of the world (like in Hisoka’s case). Now it feels like we’re just moving around to perspectives of people who are witnessing the same event just from a different point of view, so it doesn’t feel like we gained anything new. I am particularly talking about the bar chapters and how it went on for so long without any real progression beyond Gaara is now more emotional. The final thing is that it feels like Yuna isn’t really being punished in any real way for the way she is acting. It always ends with Yuna just paying someone off or saying she doesn’t have common sense and just gets away with it. I’m not saying there needs to be someone stronger than her (I actually much prefer that she stays incredibly strong as she is), but I would like to see someone go full on livid at her to the point of making her realize just how bad or annoying something she did is. Also, I do completely understand that you have a lot going on so I'm not going to say you should push yourself too much, but I did just want to vent some thoughts I had on the story. Again, thanks for the chapter! Looking for to the next!

Nilal

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