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Chapter 12 Status Report (10)
🕑 Added 2024-05-18 11:49:21 +0000 UTCDuring this week I've been splitting work between art and writing, as usual.
I've finished all the drawings needed for a major scene and they've been sent to the colorist. During this stage I'm also structuring how the scene will play out, and lately I've been using storyboards to plan things out, as scenes become more complex. Before, coming up with the structure and choosing which images to use to illustrate it was simpler, but now I take some time to think things through and I end up shuffling the order and flow of the scene until I find something that I'm happy with. I can't share those in a public post due to Patreon's guidelines, but I will in a private post if you guys are interested in seeing some bts stuff.
As I mentioned in my last report, writing is quite challenging, especially the in-between scenes that connect the major plot points. These are specially important in this update, since I'm trying to create an atmosphere that feels fresh, fun and natural and that immerses you in a summer vacation with friends. This becomes especially difficult and tedious when a single scene can have so many variations depending on how you've developed the different relationships. Often times I get the feeling I'm not managing to convincingly create dialogue that flows naturally and scenes that evoke that cozy, familiar feeling, having to chop up every dialogue in different possibilities, accounting for the various reactions characters should display and generally coming up with interesting and well-written situations that don't feel a drag to read or feel inconsistent.
I wonder if you guys got that feeling with the last update, or you're finding it satisfying enough. In this last chapter, which scenes if any were your favourites? Did you enjoy a setpiece over the rest or did a particular interaction stood out to you? What did you find missing, anddo you have any suggestions to tackle this issue and make interactions more interesting? I'm interested in hearing your thoughts and opinions; in the meanwhile I'm doing my best to craft evocative and coherent moments. Hopefully I'm doing a good enough job!
Comments
Jimmy
I noticed playing a new path that there's an inconsistent dialogue if you cheat with mark while dating Ian with Lena in the bathroom at the club. It is after the blowjob and Lena says that her boyfriend is waiting outside, Mark acknowledges and promises to keep it a secret. And then it is a bit of a strange change where lena mentions smth about not tonight, and then Mark says "oh right, you came her with another guy didn't you?". Right after promising to keep it a secret from the boyfriend waiting outside, as if he forgot what they just talked about. It's a niche scene with probably few playing it, but I found it hot and thought I'd mention the inconsistent dialogue after the scene.
Tim Schultz
I feel like I'm giving Holly a pep talk, but nah you are the best fucking writer working in the AVN space right now. Just follow your instincts and all of us will be happy.
Joseph
I found this game in the past week and I am in awe by the story, art, and amount of effort that has been put into this project. Thank you for making such a fantastic game. You are doing a great job!
megaT
Hi, wanted to say that I'd be interested in a game mode that allows you to play only as one of both characters. So you can choose, maybe the choices of the non playable character are then (semi-)randomized. I know this isn't the original idea but maybe as an optional game mode / enhancement. Why? I think it would be cool to experience the story out of one singular perspective for each playthrough.
StackedSuccess
I may be in the minority, but I'm enjoying the Lena/Stan run. I wanna see how deep this rabbit hole goes
hardy Wilhelm
The change with the female characters was very enjoyable. But (even though I'm straight xD) what I liked the most was the interaction with Wade and Perry. Interaction with them is more indirect than with female characters, but this seems to make the characters in this game feel alive and breathing.
