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1.31 notice/反馈
🕑 Added 2024-01-31 07:41:50 +0000 UTCIt's totally fine to criticize the author and provide feedback, as everyone has the right to do so. This particular storyline has indeed exposed several issues, and I would like to briefly discuss my original intentions behind its design.
Feel free to discuss the work itself and the creator, but let's avoid creating conflicts in the comment section.
1. The text volume in this update was substantial.
I mentioned this issue briefly towards the end, as the lack of time on finishing Thursday contents, which is crucial, led to my own shortcomings. If there had been content for Thursday, there might not have been as much controversy. Additionally, I took reference from some elements of the original work, aiming to provide a better textual narrative experience. However, it seems that this didn't resonate well, and I will make adjustments moving forward.
2. There was an excessive focus on Inoda's inner struggles, resulting in a weak sense of betrayal.
This is also my own doing, as I intended to shape Inoda as a somewhat perverted and comical character. Moreover, considering that many friends identified with Inoda through self-insertion, I didn't want to portray him as a complete scumbag. However, it appears that the outcome didn't satisfy everyone, and I will reassess this moving forward.
The issue with the sense of betrayal lies in the current progress. I currently don't have any remarkable developments for Inoda and Asuna's dynamic. This ties into another problem.
3. The progress is too slow, almost repeating the beginning stages of the part 1.
This storyline was influenced by the results of previous polls, where the majority voted for Kirito and Asuna to have a romantic relationship and preferred a slow-paced development. However, due to production constraints, there have been discrepancies and misdirection:
It seems that many players expected a more intense event to occur during the first massage event. But I considered that this shouldn't be a short-lived encounter like Nero's scenes. I had to consider the potential for reusing Liz and Kirito in this context.
Regarding the previous preview CG (to clarify, it was indeed Inoda's fantasy), it created unfavorable expectations. However, I couldn't deliver it on Thursday, and that's my fault. Starting from the next update, I will consider increasing the progression speed between Inoda and Asuna and introducing more engaging gameplay for Kirito himself.
Lastly, a plea:
Publicly sharing content invites criticism and suggestions, and I was not closing the comment section because people were hurling insults at me. It's impossible for me to cater to every fan's taste, and there will always be controversy surrounding the storyline. Feel free to discuss it among yourselves, but please refrain from attacking each other
非常抱歉，這次劇情確實可能暴露出了很多問題，我也姑且說下自己設計的一些初衷，
大家可以隨便討論作品本身和作者但是不要在評論區互相鬧矛盾。
①:本次更新文本量太多了
這個問題其實在最後我有稍微提到，因為這次更新算是對前面階段的結束可惜很重要的周四沒能有時間完成這是我自己的問題，如果有周四的內容可能不會有這麼多的爭議，
同時這次也是參考了一些原著的內容希望給大家帶來更好一點的文本劇情體驗，但是似乎反映並不是很好，這點之後我會改正的。
②:豬田內心戲份太多，隱奸感薄弱
這也是我自己的原因，想把豬田塑造成一個猥瑣帶點喜感的角色。而且由於之前很多朋友都提到是自我代入的豬田，也不想把他設定得過於人渣。他對亞絲娜和對其他人的不同態度，也基本符合一個舔狗舔而不得時的心態吧。
但從結果來看似乎大家也並不滿意，之後會重新評估。
隱奸感的問題出在目前的進度上，目前適合豬田和亞絲娜的玩法我也沒辦法給大家玩出什麼花來，這個豬田和亞絲娜的發展涉及到後面一個問題。
③:進度太慢，簡直是在重複第一部的開始階段內容
這個劇情其實我在本次更新結束也有提過是參考了一些投票的結果，當初投票希望桐人和亞絲娜發生關係以及希望慢進度佔了絕大部分。但由於製作進度的問題，造成了一些落差和誤導：
似乎有相當多玩家希望第一次按摩就發生了比較激烈的事件，但是我考慮過這並不是尼祿一樣的短篇我必須得莉茲和桐人以及對這個場景在重複利用的可能性。
以及之前的公告CG（未免誤解，提前說明，這個畫面確實只是豬田的幻想），給大家帶來了不好的預期感但是我本身並沒有能做到周四，這也是我的原因，從下次更新開始我會考慮增加豬亞進度和一些讓桐人本身更有趣一點的玩法。
最後一點倡議：
公開發佈就會有接受大家批評和建議的心理準備，之前的關閉評論區也不會是因為大家罵我罵的太難聽，我不可能能迎合每個粉絲的口味，劇情方面也肯定會有爭議，對於我大家可以隨便討論，但是請不要互相攻擊。
Comments
神 秘
铺垫有点太长了，反而有点枯燥，中间最好多插入点肉戏过渡一下，过于无脑或者过于复杂都不太好，希望能找到个平衡点
Avertii
It might be a good idea to take a break from this project and start working on mini projects instead. I know you gained a lot of popularity as a result of this series but tunneling into it isn't a good idea. You are skilled as a writer, there is no need to limit yourself to one project. Just work on some new projects to experiment and see how the community feels about it.
Aron34
I agree as well, I am also not a fan of one guy steal all the MC's people.
Floweyyyy
One more thought of mine: Although I've seen some people disagree with me on this, personally I'm not a fan of Inoda stealing all the girls in Kirito's life (I confess I wasn't a big fan of him fucking Asuna's mother, but it's something that I'll have to learn to accept it, since it already happened). I think I would be fine if Inoda at some point started fucking Lizbeth together with Asuna, but I would add just her to Inoda's fun (And Asuna should still be the main girl and biggest obsession for Inoda). I think an ending where Asuna leaves Kirito to become Inoda's girlfriend and Lizbeth takes the opportunity to steal Kirito, but is shown to occasionally cheat on him with Inoda, would be nice (In this situation I would like Inoda getting to fuck Lizbeth at some point, I think that could be a great ending. But that's just me, I'm just sharing my thoughts here in case someone agrees and sees value in some of them).
