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C11, PT. 2

🕑 Added 2024-06-01 15:00:06 +0000 UTC

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Kim N

As a fan of this series and since this is only a draft, I'll give my opinion honestly and candidly. Part 1 & 2 of chapter 11 feel like fillers. If they are integral to the overall story, it needs to be cut down drarticaly or moved to a better spot. Coming off the extreme high of chapter 10 where we for the first time see Jasmine initiate and take control with Roth after being offended by her sister's opinion of him, the sudden shift to all this talk about fictional new book releases, feels like an ad during the climax of a movie. Very off putting and jaring. I fully expected and looked forward to Roth interrogating her about what her sister did to upset her even after giving into her the night before. He's proven himself insightful enough to come to the right assumption that her sisters upset/hurt her and it's inline with his character to want to know, adamantly, about anyone who hurt her.

Ryu

He literally said that being married to her is living his dream 😭 I can't.. they must have their happily ever after

Priscilla

Roth keeping his promises and working less and coming home in time for dinner..


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