JPerm
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Review feedback #2
🕑 Added 2018-07-15 14:06:16 +0000 UTC What do you think I could have done better? Did I miss anything? Was any part too fast, or did something drag on for too long? Or is there anything new in here that you particularly liked? Anything, leave a comment here! I tried to make a slightly longer and better paced review. I realized from the last feedback post that I was heading in the wrong direction with regards to pace, and needed a nudge back to a more natural pace, so I want to say thanks for all your help! As always I'll keep trying to improve.
