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Chapter 4.4

🕑 Added 2024-01-14 10:04:44 +0000 UTC

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Son-Of-Scorn

It’s been a month since the last update, does anyone know if there’s been an AN somewhere?

Lictor Magnus

It’s been a couple of weeks since the last update, is everything alright?

Anonykor

Subscribed just to read these chapters. I like the concept, though we'll have to see how well it transitions to other settings. The low-level buildup is the best part of these stories, imo. In similar stories, once the characters enter settings with a decent amount of perks, either the arc feels intentionally drawn out or you have to make your antagonists escalate in ways that can break immersion. I think it was very smart to have a lot of other POVs. I've never found OP characters interesting to read about. It's the reactions from other characters in the setting and the way their presence shapes the worldbuilding at a macro-level that keeps my interest. I do think that the Kazekage and Suna may have accepted the main character a little too fast, though. It's definitely a possible outcome, but I just think the Kazekage would be a bit more cautious. If you are editing earlier chapters, I think having the Kazekage dwell more on the possible divine nature of the main character would make the speed of that transition more palpable. But that opinion may change after I do a slower reread. I was bummed to see your Persona work on hiatus. That was what got me into your work. Also, you should put the title of the story with the chapter number and tag each chapter for a filter. It's okay for now because you're just starting, but this is going to turn into a huge mess once you get further along.

I agree. There’s no way for MC to brute force his way through the situation. Shukaku wanted to be understood, Gaara wanted to understand. It worked for them. The last scene in this chapter shows Han’s hesitation at hearing them out, but as a few lines foreshadowed earlier, there’s still some part of him that *understands* this conflict is stupid. He’ll listen, but who knows if he’ll agree. Also, there’s a missing element in this whole scenario who’s significantly less likely to go with the flow. No parts have been updated as yet, but will do when there’s something to report.

Zerak

Please write a post of what you updated. Also not sure if Ninshu will work. It can’t force people to do anything. It makes both empaths so easier to connect but doesn’t mean that it’s a guarantee to work.


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