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Part 11
🕑 Added 2021-09-25 16:12:29 +0000 UTCPART ELEVEN
PAGE ONE
Panel One: Jamal is carrying a box full of stuff down the hallway, and he looks tired.
(There is a picture in the hallway that Jamal is close to passing, this picture frame is very important to the shift of the story. There is a faded out picture of a man deadlifting weights.)
Thought bubble: “Oh man I really couldn’t control myself there for a moment, I felt like I was going to burst if I didn’t get that out.”
Panel Two (SPLIT)
Split One: Jamal has turned his head to the right and has noticed the picture hanging on the wall.
Split Two: (POV) Jamal is standing in the hallway in front of the picture frame.
Jamal: “Dad.”
Panel Three: POV of the picture frame, it is a big strong man deadlifting a heavy amount of weight. There is a coach next to him yelling, the coach’s facial expression shows that he’s encouraging the bodybuilder as he’s lifting the weight.”
Jamal: “Where did this picture come from? I could have sworn mom had this at her house.”
Panel Four: Jamal’s face softens as he looks at the picture.
Jamal: “Look at you Pop, I remember being in the crowd and watching you lift all of that weight when I was little. You were like my own personal Superman.”
Panel Five (SPLIT):
Split One: Jamal puts the box down.
Split Two: Jamal is now holding the picture in his hands.
Panel Six: Jamal has his hand on the picture over his father.
Jamal: “What was it you always used to tell me?”
PAGE TWO
Panel One: FLASHBACK: Jamal is a small child and is crying. He’s fallen off of his bicycle and hurt is knee.
Panel Two (SPLIT)
SPLIT ONE: Close up of Jamal’s young face as he’s crying
SPLIT TWO: His dad’s big hand is on his face, Jamal isn’t crying but his eyes are full of tears as he’s looking at the reader.
Panel Three: His muscular dad is knelt down eye level with Jamal and his hand is still on his face.
Pop: “You had quite a fall there.”
Jamal: “My knee…it…it hurts!”
Pop: “I know son. Let’s see if you can stand up so we can get you cleaned up.”
Jamal: “I can’t Pop, it hurts to much.”
Pop: Well see if you can try son.”
Panel Four SPLIT:
Split One: Jamal is trying to stand.
Split Two: Jamal falls but his dad catches him.
Panel Five: Jamal is in his dads arms and is starting to cry again.
Jamal: “See Pop, it hurts. I’m not strong like you are, I’m too weak.”
Pop: “You’re not weak son. We all get hurt and feel pain, even your big strong Pop. But you have to take that pain and use it to make yourself stronger and learn from it.”
Panel Six: Jamal is looking up at his Pop as he’s in his arms.
Pop: “Don’t let pain or your mistakes keep you down. And never think you’re not strong enough to do something. Strength is something you gain by working through the pain and not giving up. Never give up son, you know I will always be here to help you.”
PAGE THREE
Panel One: Jamal is now a young teenager, they’re in the gym and his dad is young Jamal workout.
Narration Bubble: You weren’t lying Pop, you would always be there for me. And you made me so strong both physically and as a man.”
Panel Two: Jamal and his dad are sweating, but Pop has his arm around Jamal as they’re walking.
Pop: “Damn son! Look at you! You’re killing it I’ve never been so proud of you. My son ain’t no shrimp no more!”
Panel Three: Jamal is cleaning the gym equipment while his dad is sweeping.
Narration Bubble: This gym was more than a business to the both of us, it was a second home. It was where I grew up and it was where you taught me so much.
Panel Four: Jamal, his dad and his mom are sitting at a dinner table laughing, Jamal looks happy while he’s chewing his food.
Narration Bubble: You were always to strong and provided a good life for mom and me.
Panel Five: Jamal and his mom are looking at his Pop as he’s coughing really hard and is using his hand to cover his face.
Narration Bubble: But little did Mom and I know…
Mom: “Are you alright sweetheart?”
Pop: “Yeah…cough…I think I swallowed wrong…cough…I just need some water.”
Panel Six: Pop is standing at the kitchen sink filling up a glass of water. His face looks worried and theirs a small tear in his eye.
Narration Bubble: “You knew it was already to late because it had progressed. And you didn’t tell us because you wanted us to think you were so strong. You didn’t want us to know you were in so much pain.”
PAGE FOUR
Panel One: PRESENT DAY: Jamal is carrying the box down the hallway, he has tears in his eyes but he looks determined and strong.
Narration Bubble: “You gave me this gym, this second home. And I will do whatever it takes to keep it and make it a second home for my boys.”
Panel Two: Jamal is knocking on the woman’s restroom.
Jamal: “Miss, is everything okay? It’s been over an hour.”
Panel Three: A woman comes out of the bathroom; she has short hair and is a bit chubby but she’s wearing workout clothes.
Jamal: “Oh I’m sorry miss, did you by chance see my friend?”
Lady: “No sugar I’m the only one that’s in there.”
Jamal: “Okay sorry about that.”
Lady: “You’re fine sugar, I think I left something in there.”
Panel Four: When the woman opens the bathroom door, Jamal notices that the window and the window screen is open.
Panel Five: Jamal is driving, his face looks determined, and the back of his truck is full of boxes.
Jamal: “I’m going to fix things and make sure that my boys will have something to call their own. I’m not going to let you down Pop.”
Panel Six: Pop’s ghost is sitting next to Jamal, but it goes unnoticed.
Pop: “You’ve never let me down Jamal…but I am disappointed with what you’ve been doing behind Becky’s back.”
PAGE FIVE
Panel One: Jamal is back at his booth and he has all his boxes ready to get things set up.
Jamal: “Alright Jamal, let’s do this!”
Panel Two: The man that sold Jamal the booth is starting to walk by and Jamal notices him.
Jamal: “Hey sir excuse me! Have you seen my booth assistant Anna?”
Panel Three: The man looks at him and is confused.
Man: “Your what?”
Jamal: “The booth assistant that you all gave me, Anna. I can’t find her anywhere and I was hoping to get her help.”
Man: “We don’t have booth assistants and the only Anna that works here is the janitor and she’s off work until tomorrow.”
Jamal: “Oh, well sorry about that sir.”
Man: “Right…you have two days left to get set up and ready.”
Panel Four: Jamal is unloading a box when a man approaches him. The man has slicked back hair and his shirt says Vita-Pro.
Man: “So what are you selling?”
Jamal: “Oh hey, how are you? I’m selling a discounted gym membership.”
Panel Five: The man is laughing, and Jamal looks confused at him.
Man: “A gym membership!? You are joking, you have to be joking. No one comes to these events to work out, they come here for the pills that they think will make them look like the freaks that will be on that stage in a few days.”
Panel Six: The man is walking away and Jamal is looking at him angrily.
Man: “Well, good luck with your gym membership we will be over here actually making money.”
Jamal: (Whispering) “Yeah fuck you too buddy. Fuck that guy Jamal, you’re doing this for Becky and the boys, don’t forget that.”
PAGE SIX
Panel One: Jamal standing on a ladder and and hanging up a sign that says ‘Pumped Up Fitness... “It’s Where The Pros Go!”
Panel Two: Jamal is sweating, his face looks up set as he continues to hang the banner, in the background the man that was laughing at his is watching Jamal with his arms crossed.
Thought Bubble: “Who does that asshole think he is? I’ll show him! I’ll show all of them!”
Panel Three: Jamal is setting out some dumbells on his booth stand
Panel Four: He’s setting out pamphlets and flyers on the booth
Panel Five: From a distance peaking through a door Agent 069 is watching Jamal, she’s squinting at him with her hand on her belly.
Panel Six: Agent 069 is now looking down at her belly and is talking to it.
Agent 069: “Don’t worry little one, your dad and I are going to have a little chat.”
PAGE SEVEN
Panel One: Agent 069 opens the door and starts to walk through it.
Speech Bubble Behind 069: “Excuse me miss, are you lost?”
Panel Two: Agent 069 turns around and looks shocked. There's a man standing behind her, he’s very muscular and the word “STAFF” is written on his shirt. The man is happily smiling at her and his shirt doesn’t seem to properly fit.
Agent 069: “Where did you...I mean no. I’m not lost, thanks for asking.”
Man: “No ma’am I think you’re lost let me help you find your way.”
Panel Three: Agent 069 examines the guy a little further and notices his somewhat sloppy appearance.
Agent 069: “Is that the best shirt you find in such a rush? He must have sent you the moment I left.”
Man: “Let’s not make a scene 069 and come with me.”
Agent 069: “No...I have something important to…”
Man: “If you don’t come with me now you’re in violation of your contract and if you don’t come back I’ve been instructed to bring you back.”
Panel Four: Agent 069 is now closer to the man and is looking up at him in his face her hand is still holding the door open.
Agent 069: “I will be back when I say I’ll be back...like I said I have something to do.”
Man: “I’m sorry 069 the Doctor can’t allow you to interact with the subject any further it might...complicate things...please come with me.”
Agent 069: “No.”
Man: “Very well then...just know this isn’t personal.”
Panel Five: The man looks down at her belly
Man: “Oh...I see what’s going on...looks like 069 has a growing problem on her hands. Don’t worry I will be gentle.”
Panel Six: *Distant outward shot of the door closing behind Agent 069 and the man is standing in front of her *
Agent 069: “I won’t be gentle with you.”
PAGE EIGHT
Panel One: Back at Hoppers. Becky is breathing hard while she rubs her huge stuffed belly and looks exhausted and her eyes are closed.
Becky: “Momma really overdid it this time didn’t she?”
Panel Two: From a distance Candy and Rick are talking, he’s pressing numbers into the register and on the screen it says $356.41 he looks like he’s panicking but Candy is smiling at him.
Rick: “I don’t remember saying she could eat me out of business. I still haven’t added up the loss from the burgers you gave her. Besides the nachos and loaded fries she ate the entire menu!”
Candy: “Oh yeah I forgot about the loaded fries...maybe I should see if she wants those too.”
Panel Three: Rick looks annoyed at Candy.
Rick: “Candy this isn’t funny. Ever since you ladies got pumped up you all have been eating my restaurant profits. If it wasn’t for the strip club I would be screwed.”
Candy: “Rick, you and I know the club takes care of whatever losses you have especially since we’ve got these bellies.”
Panel Four: Candy is looking at Becky and she notices a guy at another table trying to secretly record her while Becky is relaxing and rubbing her belly.
Rick: “I’m well aware of how much I’m making because you ladies have almost doubled your commissions but that’s not the point. That lady is a bottomless pit.”
Candy: “Hold on Rick that creep over there is spying on your bottomless pit customer.”
Panel Five (SPLIT PANEL):
Spit One: Becky is in frame on the guys phone.
Split Two: Candy’s small belly is suddenly in frame with her arms crossed.
Panel Six: Candy is looking down at the man with her arms crossed and the man is looking up at her nervously.
Candy: “Can I help you with something?”
Man: “Oh no...I’m good...thanks.”
Candy: “Maybe I can ask her to help you with something since you’re spying on her.”
Man: “What? I...I...I wasn’t…”
PAGE NINE
Panel One: Candy is leaning in close to the man, the man is leaning back nervously.
Candy: “No video or photography is allowed. Not in the club and especially not in here.”
Man: “Okay...sorry...I’ve just never seen a belly so big like hers before. Is she a dancer? If so please tell me what time she goes on stage I will pay her double for a lap dance...no triple!”
Panel Two: Candy is looking back at Becky and her huge belly.
Panel Three: Rick is now standing behind Candy
Rick: “Is everything okay over here?”
Man: “Yeah...I was asking if that lady over there was one of your dancers...I wanted to know what time she went on tonight.”
Rick: “No she’s not.”
Man: “Well shit that’s disappointing I would have paid triple for a session with her!”
Panel Four: Rick is looking at the man with his eyebrows raised and is now leaning in a little closer as the man continues to talk to him. Candy is now walking away.
Rick: “Triple? Why is that?”
Man: “Why not? I mean look at her! I’ve never seen a belly like that before! And especially watching her eating all of that food...she just kept growing...it was honestly the sexiest things I’ve ever seen.”
Rick: “And what if I told you in order for you to get a VIP lap dance from her it would be...oh lets say...four hundred bucks”
Man: “I WOULD PAY IT!”
Panel Five: Rick is now looking back at Candy who is helping Becky stand up.
Man: “Heck even when that girl helping her gets bigger I will pay more...but the other lady...just wow! If she worked here I would be here every single night.”
Panel Six: Rick is looking at Becky with a smirk on his face.
Rick: “Well that’s good to know I will see what I can do.”
PAGE TEN
Panel One: Agent 069 is struggling as she’s dragging the man down an empty hallway and she’s getting closer to a door that says cleaning supplies.”
Panel Two: The man is in the closet with laying against a mop bucket and other cleaning supplies in side of the closet. He has a black eye, missing teeth and a swollen face and is knocked out.”
Agent 069: “Go ahead and take a rest big guy you deserve it. When I say no I mean no.”
Panel Three: Agent 069 is closing the door to the closet.
Panel Four: Agent 069 looks over (in the direction as if she’s looking at the reader)
Agent 069: “Well shit…”
Panel Five: Agent 069 has a tranquilizer dart in her shoulder and she looks like she’s fainting.
Panel Six: An older looking woman is standing in front of Agent 069 who is now passed out on the floor, she’s speaking into an earpiece.
Woman: “Target is out, returning to base.”
Voice in earpiece: “Good job 068 bring her in.”
Woman: “Hey Doc.”
Voice: “Yes?”
Woman: “This is the last time I will do this to my daughter.”
Voice: “Let’s hope so.”
