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🕑 Added 2021-12-18 03:56:57 +0000 UTC

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Dennis Palsson

was worried Locke was going to suggest the crystal enter through the 'out' door

Corwin Amber

'so much facter that' facter -> faster

William D. Arand

I'll try to make that more clear in my second pass. A good point.

Jlaristotle

Did Ash swallow the crystal? Or are we supposed to wonder?

Nukin Futs

Cue Hidden Valley training montage.

Jameric

Jesus Will I can see the set up from here. You are getting us invested more with these two old men Gen and Li yong and by God its going to be brutal when the inevitable happens. At some point the shields are going to have to fall, and your writting has developed so much through series I know its going to be amazing. The pain the death,the rage, the drive, the snap its coming. There are couple if places I see you evolving and its been amazing. Nadine, Steves tragic fall and tears, Renes snap and tears over the childrens, Gus losing his shit over his dad and going after his brother mark,Warners daughter and his pleas to his father. Here i feel i can already see this train coming, and my god its got the potential to be amazing. Getting the formula right i think is the hard part. Its coming together.

David Fletcher

I blame cached files within the app.

William D. Arand

Already fixed that one, too. :)

David Fletcher

There’s a second one a bit further down. Great chapter and I did not expect that twist. Not this way at least

William D. Arand

Fixed

David Fletcher

“Yeah,” muttered Nick with a sigh. Ash?


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