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🕑 Added 2021-12-21 04:18:19 +0000 UTC

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Dennis Palsson

“We bother our dear Rabbit-Kin on the trip home." - should be we'll or we will or we can?

David Dunagin

When Ash explained how he wanted his harem to operate and support each other, I expected him to tell them, "One for All; All for One!"

Corwin Amber

'Is there any questions' Is -> Are

Daniel Sifrit

You DID mention that he tended to emit a LOT of Qi though.. along with other emissions... Not that it DID anything.. but I laughed.

William D. Arand

no

Jlaristotle

Thank you. I worry about that stupid crystal, until he swallow s it. He is being so dumb to not have done it right away.

Jeff Ford

Yeah I much prefer you having Ash give the girls regular Qi injections.

I agree it’s trope-y but didn’t you basically elude to it in the first chapter when he “reached his peak”?

William D. Arand

Pretty sure I haven't put that in this world so far. It's kinda trope-y.

Mezmer

Thanks for the chapter! Though I am surprised Locke hasn’t mentioned dual cultivation yet.


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