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The Axe Falls -Ch17-

🕑 Added 2021-10-09 16:19:43 +0000 UTC

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Nick Cartwright

Only issue with this is that it feels like a harem despite it not being one. The genders are heavily weighted toward more female characters of note. If its not going to be harem it feels like it should have more noteworthy male characters. Kinda feels like a Japanese light novel with a pseudo harem (shield hero for example).

Nukin Futs

Still really enjoying the pace here, the chapters have a fantastically episodic feel. No heavy tropes that I have notice. With fun little game-system inclusions which are a nice touch. Curious and excited to see what kind of quests the System will provide in a battle; fetch, body count, skill check, or/and escort (bleh)... or context specific quests. FUN.

William D. Arand

Fixed

Tetsu-nii

Really enjoyed this chapter, typos not withstanding. Waiting for Charles to either make a break for it, or taking a shot at his father or Claudia. With the notification sent off to both His Grace the duke, and the king, even successful escape or attack(s) wouldn’t effect his ultimate fate, but that type of thoughtless, emotional reaction is about what I’d expect from Charles. At least based on what we’ve seen of him so far.

Tetsu-nii

“Knights, Magicians, Conjurers Warbows, Clerics, and Snipers” missing comma after “Conjurers”? And unless it’s a title, I wouldn’t capitalize those. Also, “had clearly heard the orders to and looked to just”: I’m guessing that first “to” should’ve been “too” (as in “also”)?

P M

I like the focus on the old school tactics. It makes me feel immersed into the story. Like Im about to run at people but I dont want to. Vulnerable, real, fear, and hope. It feels like a set up. Like the countess is going to die. You want to see her live and things go good. But that also feels like the perfect time to make things go bad so you feel the punch to the heart hurt more.


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