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Super Sales on Super Heroes 5 -CH10-

🕑 Added 2022-06-16 00:54:32 +0000 UTC

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DiabolicalGenius

"For you, Kit, I’m going to modify it a bit so it’s more controllable but allow you to temporary modify the memories of others." Can't quite tell if he's saying he's going to temporarily give her the ability to modify other's memories, or if the ability will only modify their memories temporarily and they'll get their memories back later.

Kevin McKinney

Really good chapter …

William D. Arand

I always read the comments.

Paul Bystrom

Arand himself. It's like I drew the Overgod's attention by thinking about the world too hard. :)

William D. Arand

Because it isn't -his- Kit. he doesn't own her.

Paul Bystrom

Good chapter BUT... How is kit reading his mind at the end? She couldn't read his mind in the first series or at the end of the last chapter. At the end of this chapter though she's reading his mind as he thinks about Miu.

Eliseo Rios

I second this lmao

David Fletcher

Faith magic is different.

David Fletcher

Why hasn’t anyone called her Miutwo?!?!

William D. Arand

Actually, that was kind of the goal. It needs to be trivialized. It isn't Kit. It isn't Lily. They're strangers. It isn't a Reunion

yo dude

I don't think it's unreasonable, since the premise is basically redoing what Felix did in his first world, but better, so skipping management minutia makes sense. Just kind of hoping for a bit more depth. Like, the reunion of kit and Lily was something that's been building up for a while. If it'd happened outside of a fight, it'd get a lot more attention it's due. Or at least unpacking the emotional bomb going off in her head. Asking her to just bear with it until they can delete her memories seems like it's treating it too trivially.

William D. Arand

That's fair. First arc does tend to move swiftly and quickly. First book most definitely so. Second book tends to be where things start to get off the rails further and further, often with the second arc. I can try to add some filler or fluff I guess to bridge it. I just tend to skip it since it feels like a waste of words.

yo dude

Something I've kinda wondering about, especially with dragons around, couldn't they just table flip the whole barrier or just punt it? I always thought of barriers and shields to just be anchored to the person rather than the physical location

yo dude

I'm not unhappy with the end results or direction things are going. It's just that there's no real passage of time. People talk about needing to do something in one city, and then the next chapter they're already in that city doing something.

yo dude

The pacing of the last few books seems too fast. A lot of fights just end up getting steam rolled. No build up or tension. Things just kind of happen explosively and then resolve itself just as fast. There seems to be minimal fallout or consequences.

Drew Risch

Oh, I didn't know I'd be crying today. Cool. Cool cool cool.

KiwiHermit

Damnit. I'm currently in my workplace break room and thankfully alone because I just teared up HARD reading this chapter. Will, your writing absolutely rocks my dude.

Nicholas Donovan

Felix is going to Awaken soon isn't he? He is a few steps in that path, all he needs is an oopsie and light push of a thought he refuses to let go of.

James Breaux

Kill em or screw em, either way someone is getting stabbed with something.

Nicholas Donovan

If it does my bet is the middle end of this book before the end spiral where there is only action and issues, and the actual consequences being in the third book of this trilogy right before he is in the position he needs to be before ending up where he will be. It's also likely that either they will be fully sidelined or some heartbreaking scene that will galvanize Felix's resolve to get his own Kit and Lilly back while full of regret. It all really depends on how much of a twisting William wants to give a dagger to our emotions.

David Fletcher

Wow. That hit hard. Edit: I can’t see the memory removal working anything beyond the very short term. They’re going to accidentally treat them differently and will have to tell them some of it again so Kit and Lilly don’t leave or go rogue.

James Breaux

I bet the mind wipe wears off and he somehow ends up with 2 kits and lillys

Drfman

OK that was heartbreaking seeing Andie cry. Worse than last trilogy's post epilogue.


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