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Wild Wastes 4 -ch10-

🕑 Added 2022-05-09 23:39:19 +0000 UTC

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DiabolicalGenius

"That… should be enough bait. Willing to pay, a queen, no one knows we’re here, and that we have no way to actually escape if they pushed." Another fix needed there. He hasn't mentioned any queen before that. I take it he was supposed to say the queen of their nation was aboards the ship to add even more appeal as a target? Definitely not mentioned before that line.

Nick Cartwright

I just saw that in ch11 Vince has a short distance wrist communicator so that helped clear things up. Do they have anyway to communicate with Yosemite from Europe? Or is that yet to be revealed

William D. Arand

Do they have communication tech? Yes. Does Vince have any outside of the Sword? No. I'll have to be more specific with that I suppose in the full release. Thank you for pointing it out as a question, however. More often than not, questions like that help me to hone things I felt were "adequate" but in truth aren't.

Nick Cartwright

This is something I just thought of but they have some advanced technology with them, including mechs. However am I correct in assuming they don’t have any communication technology? Seems strange if so.

Yissnakk

nah...faster :)

William D. Arand

Yeah, definitely needs editing. :D

Dennis Palsson

The end of this seems weird Vince was somewhat annoyed at the fact that the two of them could communicate with magical signals and he couldn’t see I and he couldn’t see it.

Drew Risch

I don’t know what you’re talking about, clearly the chapters need to be three times as long with three times as many per book. But all written just as quickly and just as quality as this. Obviously.

William D. Arand

3,072 words. It's about average. The longer ones go for another 200 words. the shorter ones are 200 less.

CesarC.

Was it me? But the chapter felt kinda short 😕


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