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🕑 Added 2022-10-27 02:10:56 +0000 UTC

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William D. Arand

It's a delicate balance between a character understanding what they want, thinking of it, and then taking action/voicing their desire and need. Too little time, and the character has no growth or depth whatsoever. Where they end up slamming it home in anything available. Which Wrench does, than regrets as he himself admits. It's a partial character flaw. Too much, and they look as if they're not entirely sure or recalcitrant. Or the character isn't truly sure, despite what they may say or think. Just as Wrench did. In this case, Wrench does know, doesn't know, is afraid to act, and afraid to hold still. He isn't a great thinker and does better with 0/1 thinking. He's a Fixer.

Michael Jackson

This is the trap that we see in most tropes, the protagonist knows what he needs but writing about it as if he doesnt know what he needs is apita, everyone reading goes just get on with it we dont need twenty pages of angst teenage hormonal inbalance bad life choices etc before he mans up and agrees he should god forbid talk about his feeling rather than slaming his dick balls deep in every wet dripping snatch available. Well thats my thought, i get turned off ot tune out when it happens till the story comes back to a more even keel, i get he has issues and maybe hes traumatised by events but hes lived one life knowing he needs help with emotions so bite the bullet, i must say the grae part was awesome and if he can start learning using his brain or the implant to find common names etc for things it should be awesome. Close encounters was pretty good with the light and sound show but they could have gone into harmonics wave theory etc when conversing with the aliens, just imagine i high end theory forced out in seconds trying to dumb it down to nothing more than an offshoot of apes lol.

Avoid Shisnos

The problem there is does he even really know how to properly express that that's what he wants

Nick Cartwright

A deal comes off kind of like an arranged marriage to me. Many political/arranged marriages can have love. I feel like Wrench keeps on talking about how he wants more a connection but so far has not done anything to achieve that goal. He keeps complaining about his relationships while not spending anytime on working on his relationships or communicating what he wants with any of the women he has relationships with to this point. I feel like it’s time to put his money where his mouth is and start working on his relationships. Enough talk it’s time for some action Wrenchie my boy.


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