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Wild Wastes 5 -Ch1-

🕑 Added 2022-07-22 05:15:31 +0000 UTC

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William D. Arand

I don't quite agree, but I certainly understand the sentiment.

Davonne Smith

I feel you she just shows up and declares herself queen. I feel better connection to Caroline because she had a whole adventure mission in book 3

Nick Cartwright

Also this was a great chapter to really get an idea internally how legion and Yosemite function together. I feel it was a great world building chapter.

Nick Cartwright

I’ll just say I don’t feel like the relationship of Vince and Yaris was earned. I feel it very much a “tell” and not a “show”. She has never been a long term travel companion of Vince so I don’t feel the depth of the relationship that I’m being told they have. The only girl in the stable that I feel has earned that deep of a relationship is Berenga/fes. Unfortunately she has been on the backburner for a while. Ps. I realize that much of my comments are somewhat negative or critical in nature. I just want to make it clear I’m a big fan overall. I think the vast majority of your work is a strong positive and I highly enjoy it. I just only seem to comment when I have a critique. Maybe that something I should change.


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