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The Axe Falls 2 -ch 12-

🕑 Added 2024-09-28 16:28:42 +0000 UTC
The Axe Falls 2 -ch 12-
The Axe Falls 2 -ch 12-

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Bill4042

“Sara and Jessie had spent the entirety of the time he had been setting up the trap with Julie.” I think you should add “arguing” between “Julie” and the period, or replace “spent” with “been arguing” and move the “spent” to where “been” is now. Or use any other verb that matches your intended meaning. I usually just ignore typos or mistakes, but since there was already a comment here, I figured I’d just sneak this in. Love everything you’ve written to date, and I’ll shut up now.

Kyle Stitt

Sentence that starts with “-rub it in” says it’s from Julie but I believe it should be Sara since he never asked Julie out


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