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今後使っていきたいオリジナルキャラ考えてみました

🕑 Added 2025-12-31 14:01:51 +0000 UTC

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imanoterone

i found a cute looking miniature pastry chef hat, that looks similar to those idol hats, what do you think? https://i.pinimg.com/736x/c9/f2/d6/c9f2d6846cb8538f6e8420fdd16439e3.jpg

imanoterone

- Ah, i see it now, i guess since both sides stayed at the same place, they felt like part of her clothes to me. 😅 - The strings aren't the problem to me, i like them, it's just their position at the front, if you put them in the back, you could have both an excuse to show her rear, and to explain how she didn't notice them getting shorter. - i see what you were going for, i think the size and shape are the problem, they look more like Chun LI's hair buns than donuts 😆, maybe making the base radius smaller (hair ties), and the center hole deeper might help? 🤔 as for the hat, i have no good ideas...

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Thanks a lot for the detailed feedback! - I wanted to depict her hair falling down over her shoulders. - I really liked the gimmick where the strings effectively get shorter as she gains weight, but I’ll take another look at it. - I thought having something that evokes donuts might help define her character—do you think that doesn’t work? Since this is a creative work, I wasn’t too worried about hygiene, which is part of the fun of fiction to me. Of course, if the hairstyle is too eccentric and gets in the way of the sexual appeal, then that’s something I should definitely reconsider. As for the hat, looking at it now it kind of makes her look like a baby, so I’m planning to revise that part as well.

imanoterone

I really like the concept, thought some things about the design bother me a bit: - I can't tell what she has on her shoulders, reminds me of the frills on maid clothing, but don't look like that at all. - Although the skirt looks good, i think the strings don't match with the concept, I'd suggest something similar to aprons, where the string is tied in the back. - there's too much in her hair; the hair ties and buns are too big, she has both twin tails and long bangs, and finally a hat that doesn't seem to fit with the pastry shop theme, they aren't ugly, but needlessly draw attention. Secondly, this is more a criticism about the anatomy in general. The chest, belly, thighs and legs all look great, but i feel you draw the characters necks too fat for their weight, and also, In this drawing in particular, her arms stayed too thin after gaining weight. i hope you'll take this criticism positively, as it is hard to properly translate tone in text, but i wish you the best sensei! xD