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The Intro, Reworked a Touch
🕑 Added 2023-10-30 01:15:36 +0000 UTCHere it is, the expanded introduction to Out of Cruel Space.
I've moved some things around skipped others. More along the ideas of bundling everything together properly.
For example, Love and Longing will be standing on it's own, maybe with Not Exactly Hidden mixed in later.
Your Comments, Advice and any Summaries are appreciated. The really good ones will be used as little defining blurbs, like you'd get on the cover of a book.
Comments
Kyle Kent
Thanks
Nick
Page 12-Miles refers to his rifle as his baby. It's a hold over from the very first draft where he talks more in depth about the rifle, but it's given here with no context and it's a bit confusing without the prior knowledge
Bob's your uncle
I really like how the new information about events fills in gaps about stuff that was only briefly mentioned before.
Speedsaber
Well Anyways i remember starting to read this while I was still over seas and ive greatly enjoyed it. I also appreciate some effort actually going into the rank structure. So many stories have high ranking people interacting with the lower enlisted where if yours was written like theirs admirals would be leading troops as a squad leader. Thanks for actually caring about how the story is written and I look forward to what you will write in the future.
Kyle Kent
We all have our gifts, and to be frank I spent fifteen years writing all over the place and pushing myself all over the place before I really landed in this.
Speedsaber
Ill be honest the fact you have daily updates where writing a thousand word essay for myself sucks is absolutely mind boggling.
