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Chapter Eighty-Four: Unlikely Alliances

🕑 Added 2025-07-19 00:10:45 +0000 UTC

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TheBotler

Thank you for the chapter!

Ria Corvidiva

> “Because you don’t trust, Althia,” remove the comma after 'trust' > But you don’t need to read them, you’re the one who lived it comma -> semicolon (splice) > The same cannot be said about your old teammate Haruto, so far as we can find, that boy just appeared out of thin air one day.” Another splice. Would probably change the comma after Haruto to a period and start a new sentence. > Besides, what can I do right now anyway/ / -> ? > For a long moment, the older woman looked contemplative, as if trying to figure out what to say. Finally, she just sighed. looked -> looks; sighed -> sighs (tense) > I say simply, “understanding her and her magic could be key to the revival process.” either 'simply, "and understanding her...' or 'simply. "Understanding her...' > I really do. I’m putting my faith in you here, show me that you deserve it.” One last comma splice. And... Yeah, I'm completely with Serena on this one. I don't trust Nightsong half as far as she'd allow me to throw her. I still don't think the A-Rank Council is so benevolent or well-intentioned as they claim to be, just as I don't think the Centurions are as well-intentioned or the Volcora as mindlessly evil as portrayed. Sadly, I must wait yet another week to learn more. Wishing I could just fast forward in time and learn what happens next. :(


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