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Interlude Fifteen: Life Springs Anew - Part One

🕑 Added 2025-08-16 01:45:02 +0000 UTC

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Ria Corvidiva

Oh, and I didn't even realize it at the time, but I think the chapter before the last one was the 100th chapter of the story. Prologue + 86 numbered chapters + 15 interludes means this one is 102, no?

Ria Corvidiva

She's back! Akari is finally back and alive and with a body! And... no clothes! I hope not too many other people got a glimpse of what is properly Serena's! > Fear squeezes Akari’s heart in a vice grip. vice -> vise > Serena’s Dominion Art, her living mists, appears on the outside I believe Sentinel abilities have traditionally been capitalized and bolded? > A flow that no longer took effort for Akari to maintain took -> takes (tense) > snapping and drifting away into moats of green light moats -> motes > This tree… are we in an incursion zone? But no, those look like Shanara’s buildings in the distance. Shanara -> Shinara > wrapped in the vice-like grip of a blue sentinel Akari doesn’t recognize vice -> vise > Right now, I am both beating her heart and oxygenizing her blood for her. oxygenizing -> oxygenating (While 'oxygenize' isn't incorrect, I've always seen / heard the term 'oxygenated' (or deoxygenated) to refer to blood and similar.) >Beside her, Mr. Solace placed a hand on her shoulder. placed -> places (tense) > I managed to catch a glimpse of Althia the Golden through their bond, according to her thoughts. There should be a point of power near Shinara that can heal your girlfriend. I think it the first sentence should end at 'bond', and the second should be 'According to her thoughts, there should be... > Normally, Akari might feel embarrassed to to -> too


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