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Chapter Ninety: Blessed Mists + Event Part Two

🕑 Added 2025-10-03 23:22:10 +0000 UTC

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Alusion

All the corrections have been fixed! (this week and last week)

TheBotler

Ty for the chapter!

Ria Corvidiva

> To make a home for themselves in this new world. Should end with a '?' instead since Serena is asking this about the Volcora. > As Baylee shakes her head with a disapproving glare but secretly hides an amused smirk. Remove the word 'as' (as it is, it would need to be combined with the previous sentence) > I watch Hayley, more feminine than I’ve ever seen her, and smiling along with the others as she adds to the conversation. remove the word 'and' before 'smiling along'. > We all received a message to gather from Nightsong earlier that day I think some of the participle phrases are confusing, especially because 'that day' sounds like it means both 'the current day' and 'the day of the naming ceremony' (i.e. the following day.) Maybe something like 'Earlier, we all received a message from Nightsong to gather at [GDF Headquarters] tomorrow morning'? >A rising tide of power that crashes into the dark smog that has infected the bottom of my city for far, far too long. Remove the word 'that' after 'rising tide of power'. And yay! Time to heal some people! And revivify some more sentinels!


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