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Rainhorn: Chapters 10-12 (The Weirkey Chronicles)

🕑 Added 2020-12-19 17:55:20 +0000 UTC

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Luke

I enjoyed Fiyu's perspective, was nice to have another view of things where things are actually new and unknown for one of the characters, and the titles in front of names were a bice touch.

Nandan

Good good. Hopefully I'm the only one who didn't understand the phrase on first read. Besides, requiring a little reflection on the part of the readers, when the meaning isn't immediately obvious, is not necessarily a bad thing once in a while, considering how well written and clear the text generally is.

MaliMi

In my opinion it was not confusing and home sounds better.

Sarah Lin

Hmm, it's something I'll have to consider. I try to write close third person, and Fiyu would definitely think "home", but such things shouldn't get in the way of clarity.

Nandan

Heya, I was randomly re-reading parts of the chapter, and suddenly understood these words: "First, she heard a low whistle from home". On first reading, I just couldn't grasp their meaning. I thought "from home" somehow indicated where the sound was coming from <i>now</i>, like maybe her soul<b>home</b>. I understand they're meant to be said from her point of view, but that was confusing. Maybe a clearer wording such as "as used on Ichil" would be acceptable ?

Robin Richards

I'm not sure the Arch Crafters would have actually cared. Think for a second what the bench represents. You build a public good in the middle of a city and then deny its use to 99%+ of the population. That bench represents social control, it's a daily reminder to everyone in the city that they are less than the ruling family and the moment that Fiyu and Nuada sat on it they challenged the social order. It also seems like the local soulcrafting strategy is get as high as you can then back fill your rooms and chambers. If that's the case the soul crafters in the group weren't that important They're sycophants trying to demonstrate their loyalty in the hopes of gaining the necessary materials to ascend and become someone, but until they do, they're there to be used. Once Esaire and company arrived Nuada and Fiyu weren't getting out of the situation without a fight and not telling them the terms of the fight was just another way to humiliate them further when they lost. Additionally Nuala and Fiyu are soul crafters and probably not that dangerous, if they do overstep there are three Archcrafters present, they can surely step in before anyone is seriously hurt and afterwards they can punish the offender further for excessive or even lethal force in an ordinary duel and bring the full judicial weight of the city down on Fiyu and Nuada. Which just re-iterates you don't challenge the Armeau family. All of which only got considered if at least Esaire is actually reasonably intelligent, it could be just that it's a bunch of Arrogant Young Masters finding an excuse to bully some outsiders and not adequately considering the risks

JKincaid

Yeah, they started going on about barbarians and I was thinking, you idiots are about to get someone killed.

Lamsey

I was reading it as the Deuxan bullies revelling in the lack of awareness from the barbarian outsiders. They're hardly going to stoop to explaining Deuxan customs to their lessers. How else could they continue to sneer at their ignorance?

Sarah Lin

Fixed, thanks!

Sarah Lin

Yeah, Deuxan plays much closer to those tropes. I intentionally started in Tatian, a world that's close to the opposite, to signal that I'd be doing a lot of different cultural things with this series. Of course, they all have additional wrinkles you'll learn over time. Deuxan has some surprises to reveal, and you'll learn something major about Tatian this book.

Robin Richards

Deuxan seems like the typical cultivation world. An aristocracy rooted in soul crafting monopolizing the required resources, where your worth is determined by your personal power and political affiliations.

Sarah Lin

I meant to write a serious cultural mismatch between Deuxan games and Ichili stark categories. Lots of people aren't really that familiar with other worlds and assume their own culture's norms apply, much like the real world.

Lamsey

Possible typo: "Senka, is this the shiny rock you were talking about!" Question mark -&gt; exclamation mark?

JKincaid

They aren’t the only ones that are totally confused by all this. I guess this group is the “arrogant young masters” of the area, but they mostly seem to be annoying posers. The moronic girl was about to be killed cause these idiots can’t even state the terms of the duel clearly, and whatever offense was taken is entirely ineffable. Really, whatever stupid play acting duel nonsense this is, it would actually serve them right to get killed by picking fights with foreigners and expecting them to abide by terms that haven’t even been stated.

Sarah Lin

Oh, interesting thought. In this setting, cantae is a sixth sense that isn't directly connected to the others. Fiyu does think about it more in the sense of pressure, though, just like most people view it a bit more like vision.

Mountainking

So does Fiyu sensory's technique allows her to feel cantea via weight, similar to one of the character's in The Brightest Shadow?

Sarah Lin

Fixed, thanks!

Sarah Lin

I assume they got extra weight as a "Top 1000 Reviewer" but I don't actually know.

ECD

Minor type: "then thousand" for "ten thousand".

Cameron C

I liked fiyu perspective. And I really look forward to Theo perspective next week.

Alexander Dupree

I don't understand why that review is at the top it doesn't even have the highest rating

Robin Richards

I hope that Theoknows enough to put these people in their place without causing additional trouble.

Sarah Lin

^-^

Zoe Weinstein

Thanks for the chapter. Really enjoyed fiyus pov


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