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The lady wot lunched a little too much - Chapter 8 Preview)

🕑 Added 2023-06-03 23:28:41 +0000 UTC

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Halrion

Thank you - yes you've hit the nail on the head with Ryan. He's a bit of a show off and likes flashing his wealth and using it spoil and pamper women, but isn't too thrilled about the consequences in this case!

Halrion

Thank you so much! The getting stuck in the shower scene will be based on an experience that genuinely happened to me (and I'm 5'10 weighing about 150lbs, so hopefully it will seem somewhat believable for a woman of similar height but, ah, considerably more circumferential dimensions). That's a really interesting point regarding Abby. I've not consciously set out to give her less dialogue and characterisation, but I see what you mean, and I think there are two reasons for it. The first is it being a natural result of her being the antagonist. At this point in the story, Gemma and Holly feel more like the protagonists, so there's a bit more insight into their motivations and plans and desires. This isn't something I've done consciously, it just seems to have happened. The second is that Abby's generally surly and hard-to-impress nature means she's a woman of fewer words than the others. We will get more insight into her thinking, and why she is the way she is later in the story, and it's something I'll explore more in future story arcs after this main one has finished.

JDart

Good update - hope the next part comes soon, I’m genuinely keen to find out what happens (and particularly curious about how she can’t get in to the shower and get then get stuck later on 😉) One thing I’ve noticed in more recent chapters is there’s quite a bit less dialogue/characterisation for Abby than there is for other characters (such as Holly / Gemma), aside from the Angel of gluttony thing (which is a good idea by the way!). It’s more observations from third parties. Is this an intentional thing?

Hecschuy

I particularly like Ryan in this chapter. I like the contrast that he definitely still enjoys stuffing and indulging his ladies but maybe not so much the increasing results of that pampering


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