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[Early Access][SFW]Ladies Trouble~ #2 Page 17-24

🕑 Added 2024-02-25 06:51:02 +0000 UTC

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Lu Shen 陸深

Have you thought about doing story of Data ? I felt really interested her.✨

Awesome_Alan

Another 8 pages graces us. Noice. On page 17, "I'm more than I'm capable of" can be replaced with "I'm more than capable for this". It has a better flow to it. Also on Page 21. when Eula is talking to Sophie "have some" can be changed to "enjoy our". 20+ pages already in your comic, good stuff

Arblast

The text is looking a lot better, but there are some parts that still look strange to someone who is a native English speaker. I also like the tone of the story. I am no English major or anything but I am willing to help as a native English speaker.

ActualE

Oh, I nearly forgot about that! Thank you for the tip! I'll fix it immediately.

우냐냣

On page 18, if Data says “Yes, I do.”, that means she does mind and does the job unwillingly. In some asian linguistic context (for example, mine, which is Korean! and had many suffering with these cases) if asked in negative, answering positive should mean ‘positive to the negative context’, but in English there is no such thing (Positive answers means only positive and Negative answers means only negative in any context). Thus, it would make sense that Data answers Sophia’s question as “No, I don’t mind.”.